Seren

May 01, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

lightning weeps

poetry spoke to me
all the days of my life
it found fertile ground
took root and grew

into the very core
of my being
I wrote scribbles
and as the requiem
for the dead,
is silently inscribed
into my heart

I smile and ask
"please ?can I have
some more pain" ....
in the clarity of the cut
I find the music of my soul
sings its greatest song

while I scribble on the stars
to scribes of our time
my heart weeps
of black lightning,
apart I am born

— Seren, May 01, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Aha! Here ‘tis! Black

Aha! Here 'tis! Black lightning. But you are a Beautiful Child. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DOV1YVtnEW4&feature=related And I'll never "Say Goodbye". http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zO9e_HiVB34&feature=related From my heart, Love, Beautiful Child, "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mum

Inspired by you for you ... love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

mona

16 years 2 months ago

go on Seren

good work

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

Thanks so much for the comment its appreciated love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

hippiepoet69

16 years 2 months ago

Loved it

poetry and art was my exscape. I wrote this little poem when I was 16 I had not a thing to do and I was feeling kinda blue but I didn't want to waste my time so I thought I would make my thoughts rhyme but none of them rhymed at all so I'm left staring at the wall. I was really bored. Take Care. huey

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Huey

Thanks for sharing your poem, I wrote when i was younger ... one I found shocked me because it was close to one I wrote not long ago ... glad you liked this one love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Navvy

thank you so much I am very glad you liked this one ((hugs)) love JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

anonymous1

16 years 2 months ago

In the clarity of the cut...

Seren, I like this poem. Especially the 3rd stanza. I was just talking to a fellow poet about how most of my beginning poetry was driven by anger from hurting but since I don't have that anymore, I find it difficult to hear 'the music of my soul.' I guess it just isn't loud enough or I'm not listening very carefully. Your poem inspires me to feel, listen and most of all, to write. Thank you, Lisa

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Lisa

only advice I can give is your soul never stops singing you just have to tune in to its different wave lengths ... when I first started writing I was the same as you, writing from hurt and pain but I had to listen, until it now screams at me no matter what I write ... sometimes when we have felt great pain its hard to turn that to other writes but when you do it will open a whole new world ... Glad my poem inpsires thats the greatest gift we can give as poets love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Shango007

16 years 2 months ago

Never are we more alive than

Never are we more alive than when we experience great pleasure or pain...

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Shango

In the ectasy of pleasure or the bite of pain life is as sharp as each taste whether its bitter or sweet love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Licia

thanks so much for your lovely comment made my morning ... from scribbler to poetess its been a long road lol (hugs) love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

As always beautiful thoughts laced with their stings

Ann of Norway " The silver Swan, who living had no Note, when Death approached, unlocked her silent throat." Orlando Gibbons (Can you hear the tune dear Jayne?) I don't know why this came into my mind, and yet its beautiful like the writer of this poem, so sung in sadness, this thought of yours, when there within lies all the quick of life's sharp smile in painful notes that lend the pathos to your utterances that are of another mint, they hint of life and lightning's dreadful blow. I am not comparing your early poetry to that of the mute swans voice, it never sings near death, and yet its song is in its myth related, loved, revered and maybe like that swan your verses will disperse on wings of thought that can be caught and loved just as this swan is loved. I think this will be so, so understand your thanks to fate who dealt you this hard blow. As always beautiful thoughts laced with their stings that makes them rule like kings. Love to you dear Jayne, from Ann http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tfNmZ3LCrAY&feature=related and to cheer you up :- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EwJLKdU50KE&feature=related

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Ann

Fates has never been kind to me but then I just think we all have different destinies and mine is this pathway that veers from one extreme to another ... but I am so blessed I have my kids I have my friends who are my family ... and at the beginning of each day and the end I say good morning and good night and that makes it all ok ... I can handle anything that wont kill me lol ;) I am feeling a lot better today YAYAYAYAYAYA big smiles they say sleeps a cure all I have been sleeping like the dead the last couple of days lol I have never read that line by Orlando Gibbons but its ever so beautiful is it part of a poem or just a quote ??? sigh thats just made my day thank you my darlin friend and your comment is a poem in itself love and biggest hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

raj

16 years 2 months ago

very reflective

Ms.JayCee.. It's good that the seeds of poetry found its way into your fertile mind and grew...which keeps you inspired to come up with such thoughtfull creative works... warmly...raj...

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Raj

Thank you for your thoughtful comment ... this ones inspired by Mum/kailashana so I have her to thank her sublime poetry was the inspiration for this one love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

raj

16 years 2 months ago

Being Humble..

You are being humble when you give credit to Kailashan who inspired you to write this..which is good...being humble is characteristic of a true artist...having said that you still deserve the credits because a seed (source of inspiration) still neeed a fertile ground (mind & creativity) to sprout....keep up the good writes... warmly...raj..

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

awww thank you what a lovely

awww thank you what a lovely thing to say ... I think I just blushed lol you got me speechless love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Really wondrous here

You never fail to amaze me and oh how your words reflect mine here, this being my favorite line in your new poem I find the music of my soul sings its greatest song How true, how true.. Reflections this one gave me Love, Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

I am glad you found reflection in this write hun, I read something of Annamum's the other night and this was born I played with it a tiny bit but this is pretty much how it was written and I have her to thank for this one ... love and big hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Eph

This was in part a tribute to all the wonderful poets here at Neopoet, I am always very happy when you like my poetry thanks for the read and the comment hun its much appreciated love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Damo

16 years 2 months ago

Gush

I am totally a fan. I feel a little bit like those girls screaming for Justin Beiber the other day. I am in awe. You write so beautifully. Some people just got it...

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Damo

Awwwwww Justin caused quite the stir down south the other day didnt he lol, thanks for your wonderful comment you got me blushing as well ((((hugs)))) thank you for always being so supportive and there to read love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years 2 months ago

Excellent

I too love your work, theirs a spell that you send with your words and i mean in a good way! Hugs to Australia shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Shirley

If there is a spell in my work it was inspired by this place I didnt write anything like this when I first started i was a rhyming junkie but these days I find that my mind lays in blank verse ... still love rhyming every now and then to keep it sharp lol (hugs) thanks for the lovely comment hun love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Dear JayCee

Your lovely poem describes how it was and is for me. I've been writing down my feelings most of my life and when writing a poem, it's a bit like a short story of life, and it helps me deal with day to day life. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Rosie

I am so happy you found a part of yourself in this one ... it was for all of you around me that write so superbly all the time (((hugs))) love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Esker

16 years 2 months ago

just in from writing one

and it too had Lightening and sweep in it the new storm kings sweeping the stateside America maybe coming in from the gulf where the black wound weeps fingers of god ploughing life and death strange this season nothing is certian anymore great poem Seren lots in this one struck me like a chord when I wrote mine and came here great minds think alike! Ekster~

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Steven

Strange this season is indeed we had the hottest day in 150yrs yesterday thats says something and the driest april in a long long time ... cant remember what they said ... the oil spill is a tragedy I just hope the environment can bounce back eventually they say its looking like 20 yrs so horrible great minds hun I look forward to reading it ((hugs)) so good to see you doing so well darlin love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

hobo

16 years 2 months ago

Wow

Wow this is so deep and dark, I love it. I believe great poets come from pain, beautiful work my friend

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Hobo

Darl I am so sorry to answer you late it was only Lyz's message that drew my attention to yours I dont think I got a email and if I did I forgot so please forgive me ... glad you liked my poem made my night thank you love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

At the bottom and late, lol.

Wonderful indeed. You have been busy. Terrific title, superb poem and the Enchantress is still enchanting, Love to all. From us. XX

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Lyz

Not really busy at all at the moment lol I wish I was I am going out of my mind with boredom but I can at least think and write and thats still working thank the lord lol love to everyone down there and give Jade a big hug and tell her I said HURRY UP ~! lmao we all so excited cant wait for this baby love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

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