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lou
lou

Grumpy Old Git

Old age held in fear
feelings so unsound
in my minds eye, memories clear
post puberty abound

once a youngster, bold hormones with a tear
a host of sensations unfound
supped from my father’s beer
ailing, churning unbound

Oh life’s pristine fool, from the path did veer
much uneven ground those virgin feet found
learned lessons and didn’t always hold them dear
oh youth, so arrogant and profound

instead a crock, an old dear, death seems near
teenagers seem to surround
energetic music, tunes from every sphere
wish Old Blue Eyes was around

I’ve become my mother I have found
no longer the callow youth you hear?
experienced, feel I’m on solid ground
damn it I’m old, I’m out of here

 

 
— lou, Apr 30, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Just loving it

Hey Lou how do you do? I really liked the flow in here and this poem and you know of course Old Blue Eyes...Kudos here gal and missed seeing you. I will be back around to read you again soon Love Magics Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

hi

Thanks Mona
hobo

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

lol

lol I like it. I really like these two lines experienced, feel I’m on solid ground I’m elderly, on the way out of here I am 49 and feeling that more and more, very nice work
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

HI

Thank you
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

I wish that...

there was a place in between, where we could give stars, for very good. I love the theme, and relate to it, as everyone else does. [After all, I'm 62, in a couple of weeks]. You rhymed each verse, without losing the continuity, but fell short on the rhythm. I just couldn't get it to flow, the way it should. Tweak this baby, and I will nominate it for spotlight. ~ Gee
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

Hi

i'll give the rythm a tweak, thanks Gee
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

Much better...

added a star, and put in for nom. keep on rockin' Lou. Real nice. ~ Gee
lou

lou

16 years 1 month ago

much better

I'm pleased you think so, thanks Gee