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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Apr 29, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

SILENCE FALLS


A short sharp retractioninto safer spacemollusc like Self,too easily maimed Skin's porous boundariesosmotic and inflammed,inverted viscerainvite ridicule and shame There's a dark forboding pallSelf imposed exileexludes exposureGrace spares

the fragile heart's  Fall.....  Bjr 28 April '10
— Bonitaj, Apr 29, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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ngaioBeck

16 years 2 months ago

Silence

A unique anthropological construct. I enjoyed it.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

oh DAMN!

NOT YOU AGAIN! Mr. spell check! ;) THamks your absolutely right as always! lol Boni
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

The Fragile Hearts Falls

There is a silent beauty in those words alone. You have written a wonderful piece and the myriad of some words chosen may confuse , I admit, me, lol. But then I reread a few times, I am not one to run and get the Dic, but I finally got it. We are all fragile when our hearts have been broken by many a reason and yes we do seem to hide ourselves away from the world while we tend our pain, yet it seems we only add to the torture at times. This is how I finally, read into it. Maybe quite wrong but I did find it sad. Love Lyz. Sorry for a slack review. XX
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Nice choice of words

A nice write Boni and how are you doing. I liked the part here fragile hearts fall...only to get back up again. Bravo gal love, Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

gee thanks Mona!

This was just a quick retaliatory write - so I'm glad something good came out of it! Cheers Boni
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

I see alot of that on here lately LOL

Did you draw your avatar and what does the rest of it say. And fallouts occur and nothing in life to stop it, it happens to everyone some time or other and how was your trip by the way? Love, Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

Hey Mona!

Still spending my time WELL SPENT AND WELL LIVED - carpe minute!!! having a blast - just got to The Big Apple today and have until next Monday to live it up! So much fodder for new work - just hope it all comes to fruition! THanks for your support Boni ps THE AVATAR is half of a picture which says: KEEP ME IN YOUR MIND'S EYE unfortuantely - couldn't fit it all in! ah well there'll soon be new ones lol
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Wish I could be there too

Someday too I shall make my visit back home and go to all the places that I loved so much. You have a great time and a safe trip back home. I like your avatar by the way keep me in your mind's eye... really good one! Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

Hey Mona!

sure has been one heck of a trip! Just posted a new piece today - post landing... back to reality! lol Boni
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Reread

and I still find it sad. Some falling outs can be very painful. You have expressed yourself wonderfully. XX
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Boni

Just a quick hello and to say I hope all is well now. Will catch up real soon. Great new pic, fresh. Later. XX

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