Seren

Apr 29, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Aching to Touch

I sat and wondered
when beauty,
had vanished

a sharp lust cut me
to the core
at each small nick
of beauty,
I became a masochist

I then,
became an addict
to ache

I looked upon
the unmentionable,
I was made blind

I gorged on
the forbidden fruit,
taste has all but left me

I got high
on the smell of life,
ambrosia memories
are all that are left

I touched
the sacred tree,
and was banished
to live again

so I listened
with my heart,
to the symphony
that emanated
from you

beauty has found me
aching again,
it let me see
taste, and smell you,
so when I touched

there was no
going back, this time
I am addicted

— Seren, Apr 29, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

CyberSpace

16 years 2 months ago

You would shoot me if I said

You would shoot me if I said what I am thinking lol loved your poem love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

pmsl I dont know if I wanna know ... thanks for the comment love wifey x x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Beautiful

Just like you JayCee...never to lose that beauty with words. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Rosina

The small beauties of the world are my saving grace ... I can be down in the dumps but the smallest glimpse of something simple but beautiful can lift me love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne

Softly beautiful wearing your soul upon your sleeve. I, too know what it is to be addicted to something beautiful. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Cat

I guess I did didnt I ? thanks for the beautiful comment made my night thanks for that hun love and big hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Listen to the beauty

That emenates from YOU. Without the beauty within we only see beauty without. Blind , deaf, tasteless and pretty dumb...I've lost myself to the addictation of self and love. Great poem ...your mood softened a little here...lovely Seabhac

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

You read me so well I have been in the dark of late, we all loose ourselves in love to some degree for what else is it but a slaking of a craving ;) ... I had to come out of the dark or I might have got lost for a bit ... this was a turning point write fingers crossed love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Another great smell of a write

I really walked this one with you the author and this part I loved it alot Igorged on the forbidden fruit, taste has all but left me I got high on the smell of life, ambrosia memories are all that are left It seems like this one can go on and on. Nice thinking here and lovely imagery Grazzi xxoxoxo Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

with luck it will go on forever not just with me ... thanks for your lovely comment its really appreciated I thought it was time to crawl out of the dark love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

hobo

16 years 2 months ago

Wow

Wow talk about hot, I love it :)

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Hobo

Had to laugh ... look whose talking about hot writes ?lol not a patch on your write imo love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Hey Aunty Mistress of the Pen

I give you five, you deserve much more, you are alive, and beautiful for sure. Well I love the title, content and I am addicted to your work. Thanks for the fix. Brilliant hun. Smile. XX

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Nana

Thanks for the beautiful comment made me smile needed a lift thanks darlin ... you take care of our girl and let me know if anything changes love to you all (((((hugs))))) JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Enchantress

How are you? I will let you know with Jade and I made a boo boo. The main specialist I am to see is on same day and time. I forgot when we were given the appointment for Jade. Well I have had to wait a while. I would rather go with Jade. We will work it out though, lol. I reread and you should be proud of your work, it makes us feel and when we achieve that well, anyway, perfecto. I hope you are rugged up and doin as you are told, stubborn one,lol. Love to all. Lyz. XX PS. How is Bethany enjoying work?

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Nana

how weird this I answered this a couple of hours ago when I answered eph must have done it wrong the comments not here lol ... not feeling too bad its bloody cold here tonight coldest night we have had so far ... thanks for the lovely comment hun (hugs) ... Bethany is at work tonight but shes staying at her Dads this weekend but shes loving it and shes loving having her own money lol god you would swear shes growing up in front of my eyes lol scares the shit outta me but I feel lucky shes 17 and NO boys yet lol not that they would get a chance with her brothers lol nice and quiet here tonight only Jake is here ... Trents up in north Qld lucky little buggar I wish I was there with him the weathers lovely up there apparently I am sitting here in my big fluffy gown with the hood I look like Dan but I am warm and full had dinner cooked for me tonight ooo la la lol ;) you take care hun catch you laterz love and big hugs Aunty JC "Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ephy

I am looking forward to reading the poem now lol hurry up and post someone said to me once that inspirations the greatest gift you can give someone ... glad I could be of help Sir Eph made my night thank you love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

hi jayne your pen has a might touch no matter the subject liking this one cheers ,,,,,zigs

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Got the edit for your poem nearly done I been under the weather its just suggestions will post it later when I get it done ... thanks for the comment, I am a little behind at the moment will play catch up tonight if I dont crash and burn again lol love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

jayne ah , thank you so much wow i cant wait should be interesting cheers , you rest up and we will catch up soon THANK YOU ,,zigs x

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

I love old legends Ziggy so

I love old legends Ziggy so the pleasures all mind just a few changes nothing drastic but because I been sick I have been slow so I apologise for that love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 2 months ago

how delicately you bring out

how delicately you bring out the feelings and sentiments. lovely and lovely. shan

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

From you that means alot to

From you that means alot to me thanks Shan big hugs love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 2 months ago

the quote you referred to

the quote you referred to above means me a lot. if time permits you visit my blog: rmshanmugam.blogspot.com

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Shan I have saved and will

Shan I have saved and will take a look after lunch is over, thanks for thinking of me ... that quote is one of my favourites glad it resonates in you as well love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Tim

16 years 2 months ago

Hi, Hope you are okay–

Hi, Hope you are okay-- another WOW from me! take care, Tim

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Tim

I am not too bad at the moment I am slowly coming good the wow is very much appreciated ... love and hugs to you JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years 2 months ago

Raunchy piece !

Well done JC beutifully written and now im aroused! shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Shirley

thanks so much for the read lol sorry for that lol or not hahaha smiles love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Damo

16 years 2 months ago

No matter what you write

No matter what you write about, it is always sensuous.

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Damo

I dont set out to write that way lol but I am always glad when you guys like them .. thanks for the support and the comment its always appreciated love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

hippiepoet69

16 years 2 months ago

Bravo

Oh! how can I relate. I just had a relapse of an old addiction, Holly. Take Care. huey

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Huey

there are so many kinds of addictions this is but one ... relapses are expected with something that takes over the soul and the mind I wish you a strong spirit hun(hugs) ... thanks for the comment and the bravo its appreciated ... very glad you liked my scribble love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years 2 months ago

so addicted

How I wish some one was so addicted to me the life in this world I’ve yet to see, what is the meaning of Addiction please do tell me, your thoughts are so very lovely why shouldn’t then Addicted you be?

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Love

My beautiful addiction ;) ahhhh but if I told you then the mystic is lost ;) love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years 2 months ago

perhaps I was born

I was born As a matter of fact on a lonely sojourn And That’s how a poet, A natural one, I was born But never felt forlorn… Now from this site I shall soon perhaps be gone. Your poetry is exquisite, It makes my heart palpitate When I read your poems I hesitate, To pen my thoughts Perhaps these are my last.

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Loved

I wasnt born a poet ... but found myself writing anyway ... I hope your not leaving us Loved ...?? exquisite is one of my favourite words and for you to use it makes my heart dance thank you ... your thoughts are everlasting ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years 2 months ago

i shall stay

I shall stay Just to learn more from you You all WONDERFULL poets I can't stay without you And As I tend to improve I shall have my say Which hopefully You would listen to Won’t you?

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Loved

I have said it time and again but this place made me into a better writer ... I am glad you decided to stay there is no reason to ... and i see you have grown as A poet and it would be a shame to see that go to waste wouldnt it ? love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years 2 months ago

THANKS

...ON THE OTHER SITE I WORK a fan has bloated me to the level of dead nobel laurettes would u like to read his version and my reply should u decide to then let me know i shall post it in ur msg column or else u could visit.... as a guest www.triond.com lovelyhoney happy reading and thanks once again for ur encouragememnt which i value most regards as usual

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Loved

I am a teacher as well as a singer its important to encourage anyone be they a child or an adult ... in my experience people respond better to positive than negative enforcement but thats just me others share different views I chose to stay with what works for me ... will have a look at that link tomorrow I have been very busy and have my hands full tonight but I will go and look in the morning love and hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years 2 months ago

thanks again and again

Seren I am a very positive person Most of the ailing humanity Is negative Haven’t you observed the earth? It absorbs max of lightening When it falls, But it falls once in a while As it is positive I shall revert to you sooner than later. I am working on an INTERNATIONAL POETS VENTURE lets see if it does rootify Ur good wishes Are needed LOVED www.triond.com lovelyhoney

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Loved

You have my good wishes i hope the project is very successful ~! love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

panaella

16 years 2 months ago

Luscious

Luscious poem using all the senses as usual...it's so effortless...you really inspire me JC. Luv Ells x

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ells

I love the word luscious ... I am so very happy you liked it Ells ... and I look forward to reading the inspiration your poetry is wonderfully inspiring in itself love and big hugs JayCee x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

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