When I love

When I loveI feel that I am the king of timeI possess the earth and everything on itand ride into the sun upon my horse.When I loveI become liquid lightinvisible to the eyeand the poems in my notebooksbecome fields of mimosa and poppyWhen I lovethe water gushes from my fingersgrass grows on my tonguewhen I loveI become time outside all time.When I love a womanall the treesrun barefoot toward me...

— mona, Apr 28, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: LBY

Favorite Poets: Some Arab poets, my love once, .....Dear friends too

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Now this is a poem of love!

Now this is a poem of love! Heading to the landscape of Rumi. ~A 4th line: ride my stallion into the sunset (use an adjective to describe horse) Also, the last lines do not need to be separated in stanzas two and three to display their brilliance. Lol. I try to polish THIS poem, well ok, at least your version. "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach

mona

16 years 1 month ago

thanks for your comment

but about this poem : its the poet's feeling+ his own imagination. my opinion: when the true love will happen, you will be ready to do any +every thing for your lover. then.. just small smile or acceptance from the other side(your lover) you will feel that you got the world. dear :the plain man has great feeling inside, hidden by days of routines and I'm sure that will explore in the right time.

chumfin

16 years 1 month ago

arabian queen

you are a very amazing poet i love this poem permit me to use it, i would love to send it for publicacation in a website magazine magazine,with all credits to you GREAT POEM CHUMFIN i love deeply al the lines, not one left out when I love I feel that I am the king of time I possess the earth and everything on it and ride into the sun upon my horse. *** When I love I become liquid light invisible to the eye and the poems in my notebooks become fields of mimosa and poppy. *** When I love the water gushes from my fingers grass grows on my tongue when I love I become time outside all time. *** When I love a woman all the trees run barefoot toward me…

mona

16 years 1 month ago

thanks my friend...but

I've received your private message my friend but I'm afraid that you miss understood ,because : I've mentioned that this poem belong to the great poet : Nizar Qabani 1923-1998. a modern Arab poet and if you are interested to do that you have to know that the original text is in Arabic language

chumfin

16 years 1 month ago

now i see , but you did a

now i see , but you did a gret job making it english. chumfin

Dalton

16 years 1 month ago

perfection. i wouldn’t

perfection. i wouldn't change a single phrase. We are all steedmasters of our own souls it is good to find a woman who can speak eloquently of how she loves. john x