Seren

Apr 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Till the Next Time...

A thousand,
no ! a million times
I have tried to picture
your face,
but as my memory ages
so does its recall, of you

the first frost came this morning,
I walked barefoot, knowing
you were there with me,
the spirit for life
you left inside me,
is now my guide
and burns my trail

my feet numb,
I shiver remembrance
and goosebumps form
as forever I will look back

I am haunted
by the footprints
that are not
next to mine

— Seren, Apr 26, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

CyberSpace

16 years 1 month ago

very sad poem baby but orsm

very sad poem baby but orsm as usual love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

thanks gotta fix it lol didnt notice part of it was missing love and hugs wifey x x x x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne, this poem reminds me

Jayne, this poem reminds me of *Footprints*. Strange thing about memory, it fadess but the feelings......... last for a lifetime. Please do not separate the last line from the last stanza. It can't stand by itself and no comma is needed. Love, Annamom "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mum

I have to say with time the feelings (not so much the grief) has intensified I can now feel about somethings without falling to pieces ... but there are those few memories or moments that at just a thought can bring me undone ... thanks for your comment thats the best thing you could say ... 'footprints' has a special meaning for me was given to me when I needed some hope I guess you could say ... and I agree with your suggestion and I fixed it ... I wasnt sure whether to leave the space or loose it love and hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

I will...

wait until you have fixed this, to include the missing part before I comment, I do like what I have seen so far. higgest bugs and lotta love, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Gee

Its done now ... the poem anyway, the pain never goes away ... so more poems will be born from this pain, todays an anniversary day for me ... having a hard time not crying but I am being tough love and big hugs JayCee x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

Loss of a child...

for a mother, must be such a terrible thing. I cannot profess to know that kind of pain. Mothers carry a child, inside themselves and share their body. A man cannot do that. I have dealt with loss of loved ones, but this cannot compare. So sorry for your loss. You be tough all you want, but having a good cry, never hurts to ease the pain. Higgest bugs, and lotta love~ Gee

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

I cried all day on and off

I cried all day on and off yesterday today I am just drained but cleansed sometimes you just have to let it out ... thanks for being there hugs I am so sorry for the late reply I just stumbled on this by accident didnt get an email for this one I would have remembered your comment ... love and higgliest bugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

Geezer

16 years 1 month ago

'S ok...

Been a little under the weather myself. Hope you are feeling better soon. Love and hig bugs, ~ Gee

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

I, too, thought of *footprints* as I read this. Then I thought it was about losing someone very close to you. It is sad with an aura of beauty surrounding it. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Cat

Its funny that poem didnt come into my mind till Anna mentioned it but I know what you both mean ... it is about losing someone very close today is an anniverary im struggling in the early hours of it dont know how I am going to get through the day its always a hard day ... losing children is never easy and time doesnt make it so just makes it magnify for me ... its hard to explain you think you cant grieve anymore and it hits you again ... love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Mariposa

16 years 1 month ago

Leaves me wondering

if you will ever disclose who is this person who has strayed from you, that he inspires so many beautiful poems...This poem was exceptionally beautiful. Your sister in ink, Jhena

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jhena

Todays an anniversary and this ones different to the ones you mean ... and I know what you mean I probably wont ever tell who 'he' is ... but I will continue to write ... thanks for the lovely comment love in ink and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Ah Seren

So many of your poems evoke so much of my own sadness and pain that I can relate to them on a profound level. As ever, you have touched a raw nerve and I don't know if I should thank you for that or merely praise your craft in its ability to do so! To Our Poetess of Note Thank you! Boni

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni

I was sitting here thinking of what you said ... for all there is a shared pain ... and it truely is a great compliment you left ... thanks or praise isnt needed that you connect is enough love and hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Eph

My footprints will wander far and wide ... and probably have traveled past you at some stage ... ;) love and big hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

hi

hi jayne , i can tell this was from the heart , sadly brilliant jayne , touching ,,zigs x

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ziggy

thanks for the read and the lovely comment there is a second one to this one and I am going to post it tonight I appreciate it love and big hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Left an imprint

On my footprint.. Well executed poem here with alot of meaning and thought behind it. A feeling so strong for someone that is gone and memories leaving heartfelt feelings close to mind... Very nice here JC Love, Mona xoxox TIME well spent is TIME well lived

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Mona

Thanks so much for the lovely comment dear lady ... and this feeling couldnt be stronger the next poem ... well its a little painful dont know that many will want to read ... but I appreciate your time and coming to read love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 1 month ago

a touching poem. the first

a touching poem. the first stranza made me flat. i love your writing. shan

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Shan

thank you so much for your lovely comment ... I love your writing as well and coming from you that means a lot to me love and many hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

loved

16 years 1 month ago

just

SILENTLY WONDERFUL FIVE STAR UNDOUBTEDLY FOR UUUUUUUUUUUUUU

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

thanks for the pretties and the read its much appreciated ... loved your latest love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

the_fool

16 years 1 month ago

scary

feels like you're being chased when i read this- a frantic running panic! and at the same time you sound tired of all of it. makes me want to relax. thx.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Fool

not sure if we are reading the same poem ... this poems about loss ... the loss of a child and looking back wishing his footprints were next to mine ... I can never imagine a time I would get tired of missing my son kind regards Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Brilliant

Reminds me of `Footprints in the Sand` when there was only one set of footprints because God was carring him...Superb JayCee. Footprints in the Sand One night I dreamed I was walking along the beach with the Lord. Many scenes from my life flashed across the sky. In each scene I noticed footprints in the sand. Sometimes there were two sets of footprints, other times there were one set of footprints. This bothered me because I noticed that during the low periods of my life, when I was suffering from anguish, sorrow or defeat, I could see only one set of footprints. So I said to the Lord, "You promised me Lord, that if I followed you, you would walk with me always. But I have noticed that during the most trying periods of my life there have only been one set of footprints in the sand. Why, when I needed you most, you have not been there for me?" The Lord replied, "The times when you have seen only one set of footprints in the sand, is when I carried you." By Mary Stevenson Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

I love that poem it was given to me by a friend when I hit a low time in my life its always been a favourite of mine, thanks so much your not the first to notice but adding the poem, for those who may not have read it before ... (hugs) thank you I am just about to go finish off the second of these ... well see if I can anyway love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

I love this poem too

I thought you would know this one. I did add it because I thought it was a good example of your thoughts and I thought if others could read it too they'd appreciate it for what it stands for. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

I have a copy of it here

I have a copy of it here somewhere but I am about to renovate the bedroom so I have been putting things in boxes I dont want damaged lol last time we reno'd my cauldren and dragon got broken lol pissed me off so bad wont let anyone buy me a new one it was a huge ornament with a wizard etc ... sorry to ramble I started off to say thanks lol love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Navvy

it was a long time ago but the pain never lessens ... the only thing I have found its easier for me to write it as time goes on ... Painting with words is really what we do, thanks for your lovely comment and big hug I really appreciated it love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

Seren,outstanding work.

I need just to tell you yesterday i also read your dream poem "again" and last night i dreamt that the man i bought my house from was sitting in my arm chair, i asked why was he here, and he said he had changed his mind and did not want to leave his house! in my dream there were even lawyers, i woke up and went to shut all my windows and doors! so now just to say your poetry leaves footprints in my mind you are so wonderful at writing and as much as you look forward to reading everybodies work im sure they will agree we and i look forward to yours! Hugs to you shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Shirley

That is really high praise there are a lot of writers here that in my opinion would write me under the table but that you enjoyed it well made my night hun I am so glad you enjoy reading my scribbles ... my god I cant believe you dreamt about your landlord lol hope its just that a 'dream' you know your readers are taking notice when they dream it ... I have actually dreamed some of my poems I have posted here and I dream in colour which I ahve been told its not possible lol but I do all the time ... and your message came at a time I needed a lift ((hugs)) love and big hugs JayCee x x ("Quote:- Death is the great adventure beside which moon landings and space trips pale into insignificance. Addison Joseph")

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

I cry real tears

for you. I feel your pain and this is a beautifully worded poem of strength as well as love. I know you know I understand but that does not make it any easier. All my love and hunny, there maybe no footprints but you cradle in your heart with love. Always. XX

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Lyz

There are few poems I find hard to read but this is one of the ones I will have to come back to later ... I sometimes wonder if it gets easier and then look back and know it doesnt love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")