Caucasion Rap

Hi lou, Interesting theme...It's just a personal preference but if you restructured your lines to reinforce keys words and phrases and the repititon I think it would flow easier. Liked it though. Ells x

I cannot knock you on your back here Lou. Nor can I comment on the form, if you change anything, it will be without *my feedback*. However, I will address the context of your poem: I find the teenagers of every generation to be quite *appropriate*... it seems harder and harder to break down the walls of previous generations. And yet, like Pink Floyd's The Wall, every generation chips away at the status quo, thank God, Buddha, Krishna, etc. Who sees the subculture of teenage reality in a world that adults create? Few, precious few. Thank you Lou. I'm reminded of "We didn't start the fire." (Love this version) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8JiOdmPQcNU ~ Billy Joel ~Anna "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach