"h e a v e n" by:itzhak bareket.

The chatroom on Sat. night, has looked at your poem, to try and acertain why it was on the lonely list. [no comments] we all thought it was a poem that had potential, but were of mixed notions as to what exactly you were trying to say, with the lines: but every single second was, mom's mother and dad's father, all of the most precious times We thought that maybe if you had expanded on that thought, you might have gotten some comments. As it were, we didn't think that anyone was comfortable in commenting without knowing what that meant. Please, explain what you meant by these lines. This could be made into a great, if not awesome poem with some additional work. ~ Geezer's chat, Lonely poems list - 5-22-10