Candlewitch

Apr 23, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Impotence (Eddy Styx poem)

"Impotence"

She...

She wraps her words around me

like a warm tortilla.

I want to eat her eyes

so I can see

(me)

the way she does.

Her volcanic verbs shoot

P...U...L...S...I...N...G

hot liquid through my veins

and

SHE causes me to lose all

CoNtRoL

over my bladder

and

I turn my red(face) to the shadows.

and

quickly s~l~i~n~k away.

If (i) were woman

and

SHE were man

This would NOT be unacceptable

male (frailty) weakness

but

demure beguiling femininity

I want to lie cradled in her semi-precious metaphors!

(This poem can be found online in my first book of dark poetry at: http://www.genremall.com/poetryr.htm#bookofstyx

— Candlewitch, Apr 23, 2010

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Cat

Love it...the structure...everything. Rosina xena465

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

Thank you! This is different from what I normally write. Always, Eddy/Cat

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

I can only smile. ~A Out beyond ideas of wrong-doing and right-doing, there is a field. I'll meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about. Ideas, language, even the phrase 'each other' doesn't make any sense. --Rumi

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Anna

Back at ya, lovely lady! Always, Cat

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

grinning

love this eddy you tell cat to be nicer about your male frailties lol judy

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judy

I'm so glad this one tickled your fancy! Love, Eddy/Cat

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Eph

Thanks, glad you read it. Love, Eddy/Cat

loved

16 years 1 month ago

love it

JUST LOVE IT WHAT BEAUTY AND CREATIVITY

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Loved

Thank you. Always, Eddy/Cat

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Cat

I can only smile lol I love that poem ... love and big hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

I consider you to be the number one Eddy Styx fan ;) Love, Eddy/Cat

Hooded Stranger

16 years 1 month ago

STYX

Cat, being most fortunate to already have a copy of your book, this one is a well known piece to me. My opinions of this one haven't changed, it is STYX through and through. I recall from the first time I read it that it was distracted, broken and distorted with truth and lies and split into fragments of a crazed mind. Capital letters smacked me, single words trapped in brackets of steel and volcanic verbs mixed in upper and lower cases. This is a highlight from your book. BUY THIS BOOK NOW! Regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dan

I think if anyone truly "gets" Styx, it is you. Evil minds think a like, LOL! Thanks for giving my book a plug. You are a dear friend. Always, Cat

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

This is different from a

This is different from a different pov. nice work

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Hobo

Nice to see you! Thank you for the pretty stars and the nice comment. Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

cat

wow cat what a write , the opening lines really set this write off so well and the way you set out the lines really add to it and the meaning through it now this last line really struck me totally brilliant cat " i want to lie cradled in her semi precious metaphors " that line is one of my fav`s here for a while love it and eddie`s words ,,,, o i`d love to own your book cat when i get sorted ill ask again mmmmmmmmmm ,,,,zigs

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ziggy

Thanks so much for really reading the poem. That line is one of my favorites, too. If you have trouble getting the genre mall to send to your country, perhaps I could purchase a copy for you and send it to you myself. It is only $5.50 in the U.S. Always, Cat