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judyanne
judyanne
Apr 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Anzac Morn

 

 

 Soft shuffles in the shadowed stillness.

Quietly standing in mass unison.

An aura, an air of sombre sadness.

All silent, awaiting the rise of sun.

 

And back over there in the past somewhere,

not ready for battle, adventure bound,

young diggers with guns and eyes that show fear,

wait for the order to storm Turkish ground.

At oh what carnage and at oh what cost,

while back home mother and wife gravely pray

for boys in a battle already lost,

as the sun dawns red above Suvla Bay.

 

Today, sunrise over words in stone set,

The Ode to Remembrance, lest we forget.

 

 

They shall grow not old,
As we that are left grow old,
Age shall not weary them,
Nor the years condemn.
At the going down of the sun,
And in the morning
We will remember them.

 

 

— judyanne, Apr 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

loved the style

Dear J., The curse of man is that we forget. you did an awesome job on this one. I especially liked the way you ended: Today, sunrise over words in stone set The ode to Remembrance, lest we forget P.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks P

i appreciate your visit and your supportive comment love j
M

Mariposa

16 years 1 month ago

Such truth, spoken so fluently

The line where you said, "Not set for battle, adventure bound" really resonated in me. I was reminded of "The Red Badge of Courage." Thank you for another great poem, Jhena
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Wow!

You sure are blossoming as a great poet...I commend you with your new style...wish I could write like this...Brilliant. Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

thank you so much rosina

that is a huge confidence booster you just gave me i don't think anyone has said wow before. i am really enjoying these attempts at sonnets lol judy
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judy

You deserve it. Your hard work has paid off with honours. Rosina xena465
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judy

This piece is packed with passion and regret. Strong sentiment here! Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Judd

Nothing in my mind is more important ... than this The Ode They shall grow not old, As we that are left grow old, Age shall not weary them, Nor the years condemn. At the going down of the sun, And in the morning We will remember them. The Ode came from 'For the Fallen', a poem by the English poet and writer Laurence Binyon and was published in London in The Winnowing Fan: Poems on the Great War in 1914. The verse which became the League Ode was already used in association with commemoration services in Australia in 1921. wondeful tribute Judd one of the best I have read for some time love and biggest hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

yes jc i know

lest we forget is rudyard kipling from god of our fathers known of old and is used in the service too i obviously haven't seperated the two sentiments well enough? as the sun rises over the ode to remembrance, lest we forget any suggestions? lol judd
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Yes I like that Judd but I

Yes I like that Judd but I really think its a brilliant write ... you should be proud I am (hugs) love JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

As requested I am here to

As requested I am here to look 'er over, great read. Soft/ shuf/fles in/ the/ sha/dow/ed still/ness.10 Quiet/ly stand/ing in/ mass/ uni/son. 8 An aura, an air of sombre sadness. 10 All silent, awaiting the rise of sun. 10 And back over there in the past somewhere, 10 not set for battle, adventure bound, 10 young/ dig/ger/s with/ gun/s and/ eye/s that/ show/ fear, 11-13 depending on 's. wait the order to storm Turkish ground. 10 At oh what carnage and at oh what cost, 10 while back home mother and wife gravely pray 10 for boys in a battle already lost, 10 as/ the/ sun/ dawn/s red/ a/bove Suv/la/ Bay. 11 To/day/, sun/rise/ ov/er/ word/s in/ stone/ set, 11 The/ Ode/ to/ Re/mem/br/ance, lest/ we/ for/get. 11 They shall grow not old, As we that are left grow old, Age shall not weary them, Nor the years condemn. At the going down of the sun, And in the morning We will remember them. Nice closing stanza, It is not of perfect form Judyanne, but that is only part of the task. Great ryhme scheme. It has a great theme and sentiment, great tribute! I hope that helps. Julie D.D.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

thanks Julie

appreciated i'm still having trouble with the count obviously. the esses really mess me up. these lines though i query??? Quiet/ly/ stand/ing in/ mass/ uni/son. 8 i read as Qu/iet/ly/ stand/ing in/ mass/ un/i/son. 10 The/ Ode/ to/ Re/mem/br/ance,/ lest/ we/ for/get. 11 and The/ Ode/ to/ Re/mem/brance,/ lest/ we/ for/get. 10 your thoughts appreciated. it's good to get another view thanks again judy
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

On the first set you are

On the first set you are right Judy, I must have been going to fast. On the second, its more up to how its pronounced I think. I still count four sylables in Rememberance, but you could run the end together and I see why you are getting your count. I pronounce all 4 sylables though. I wish I knew more about the battle you speak of, but I guess its not taught in our schools and I have never heard of it. Which is why I have no content suggestions, I just plum don't know. Sounds like alot of good people died. Julie D.D.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

thanks julie

Anzac day is our national day of Remembrance of all those who have fought in all the wars Australia has been involved in. The first service was in 1923. On 25th April 1915 Australian and New Zealand troops landed at Suvla Bay, Gallipoli. From the first day it was a disaster, many killed on the beaches before they even reached the cliffs (they’d landed at the wrong place, apparently) later skirmishes in the trenches badly planned, mistakes made, and man after man being sent over the top to just be cut down as they charged The battle(s) lasted until 20th December 1915 and the accepted official estimate of loss of Australian life is over 8,000, the roll of honour lists 749 to have died on the first day This campaign was the first time Australia had fought as a country in its own right – in the Boer War for example they had fought under British battalions – so it came to be seen over the years as ‘the birthing of our nation’. the national and state services are held at dawn as that is when the first troops landed lol judy
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

i forgot to say

wish i had written it but the last closing stanza is the actual part of the ode to remembrance recited at the service. - see jayne-chloe's comment re the author etc. xxx
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manawa

16 years 1 month ago

awesome judy well put well

awesome judy well put well done full stop carry on. I had a go at an anzac poem today but yours goes to a whole other level a gem. cheers m
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

thanks manawa

for your lovely comment i'll be looking up your anzac poem love judy
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

hey bud !!!!

OK look what i noticed today....... "Shall/I/com/pare/thee/to/a/summer/'s/day - 11 if you count the 's' so if he can so can i - i'm not gunna count them any more unless it suits me to now i can concentrate on that damn step/STEP/step/STEP..... love judd