Seren

Apr 22, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

silhouette of contemplation

within another world
a silhouette times
contemplation,
the trees listen
their scrim,
rustle
playing a patchwork
of light over her face

the trees knew
if they
stayed still enough,
quiet long enough,
a secret wrapped
around her mind,

would unravel

their wait
will be eternal
as she sleeps
the seasons turn,

and the roots
of the trees
wind

to bind her

— Seren, Apr 22, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dale

Your wonderful comment is gift enough thanks for the read ... I do appreciate it sorry for being late answering I have been down for the count ... love and big hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

CyberSpace

16 years 1 month ago

orsm poem my love something

orsm poem my love something different about this one love hubby xoxoxoxoxoxoxox

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Your right lol but I aint

Your right lol but I aint telling unless someone guesses lol love and hugs wifey x x x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Tim

16 years 1 month ago

another beautiful and moving

another beautiful and moving poem, you seem to be a very talented lady! by the way, I've only just discovered how you have had to battle with health problems. I really hope and pray you are feeling much better now. you take care, luv Tim.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Tim

Thanks for your lovely comment ... hmmm I dont know about talent but I have passion if that counts for anything lol and no not many newcomers would know of my health problems I dont speak of it here anymore not because I dont want people to know ?? but I would rather they judge my writing skills than focus on my illness ... I am a battler hanging in but there is always someone worse off than me .. thanks for your prayers they are appreciated had my last treatment yesterday I now WAIT and then get retested and we will see how the land lies love and hugs JayCee x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

ziggy

16 years 1 month ago

how`d

hi jayne i like the ending to this one great summing up " a secret wrapped around her mind would unravel " as good as ever jayne ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Ziggy

its always good to see you big smiles thanks for the wonderful comment (((hugs))) love JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Lovely JayCee

I love it...the ending is wonderful. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

Another Big Smile ... thank you rosie girl I am always happy when you like my writes love and big hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

I really like what Dale had to say on this piece. I don't think I could say it any better than he did. both your poem and his comment are beautiful. Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Cat

It was a lovely comment wasn't it ... thank you as well I do appreciate the reads and the comments I am sorry to be late answering been in bed most of the last four days ... love and big hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

partacidcharm

16 years 1 month ago

another fabulous write from

another fabulous write from your pen (or keyboard? ;) m

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear M

Pen and keyboard lol I write them then transfer and edit ... thanks for the lovely comment its much appreicated love and big hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

pamela

16 years 1 month ago

powerful

Dear S., This is woven so beautifully. You are very gifted poet. and the roots of the trees wind to bind her. I just love the way you ended it. P.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear P

Thanks for your beautiful comment ... i dont know about gifted but passionate is a definate yes lol ... love and big hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

WOnderful read Seren, I am

WOnderful read Seren, I am always so far back in the pack to tell you these days, everyone else did it so well. I to loved your ending. Great read. Julie D.D.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Julie

So good to see you I am sorry to be late answering but so very happy you enjoyed it ... this ones close to my heart (((hugs))) thanks hun love JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll