Twilight Entwined

Harmonious Rhythm ... loved your reference in the end line ... will leave it for others to discover ,... so lovely to read you again only thing I would break it up into stanza's Dale to give impact to your words love and hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll

All I can say is, Boy you are Good. This is what I am used to in your writes. Bloody marvelous. Love Lyz. XX

I was enchanted by these lines: From bright, breeze blown buttercups scenting sweet maybes, to bare-backed beetles dawdling dandily in bosoms of daisies, through to the distant humming of a darting dragonfly, and the percussion of a moon-seeking moth fluttering by, they will majestically capture you, magically in the night, spellbinding you with seductive sorcery, stotting your sight, because of all the romantic wonders that mankind can find, there are none greater than the eurhythmy of twilight entwined. Now, what is this nonsense about not being able to write as well as I do? This piece is amazing! I loved the visuals! The only suggestion I have is to watch your spelling. I use my outgoing e-mail as a spell checker. Always, Cat

I concur with all of the above...wonderful write with lovely descriptions. Rosina xena465

Amazing ! How wonderful and lovely your poetry is dear Dale. I am so happy to see you in the spotlight. Congratulations ! Please never stop writing . Much Love o molly

Description is first rate. great job

Holy jeez!!!! Wicked write, could see the images as clear as crystal!!! Sounds very much like a world I`d like to visit when this one is well...what it is. It takes a brilliant image maker to make a place appear so vividly in someone`s mind and you have done just that, dear Dale. And congrats on spotlight, much deserved! Peace

Congratulations on the spotlight position. You earned it! Always, Cat

Ann of Norway Dear romantic Dale of the twilight visions. A most lovely atmosphere full of night life and colour:- "for sapphire moonbeams illuminate bubbling brooks," It does, for me, however seem slightly mixed in its contents, mixed in style, but as I am no expert on judging that academically, I should just keep quiet! And yet it deserves my thoughts dear Dale. For instance:- "to bare-backed beetles dawdling dandily in bosoms of daisies," & "with glowing fireflies revealing sloping slugs’ slimy trails." the alliteration in this gives the feeling that Gerard Manley Hopkins played a part,:- (Off to read for my comment:oh boy I read of "prosody" and "Sprung rhythm"!!!) From Wikepedia "Hopkins called his own rhythmic structure sprung rhythm. Sprung rhythm is structured around feet with a variable number of syllables, generally between one and four syllables per foot, with the stress always falling on the first syllable in a foot. In reality, it more closely resembles the "rolling stresses" of Robinson's Jeffers, another poet who rejected conventional meter. Hopkins saw sprung rhythm as a way to escape the constraints of running rhythm, which he said inevitably pushed poetry written in it to become "same and tame." In this way, Hopkins can be seen as anticipating much of free verse...........He often creates compound adjectives, sometimes with a hyphen (such as dapple-dawn-drawn falcon) but often without, as in rolling level underneath him steady air.... Added richness comes from Hopkins’s extensive use of alliteration, assonance, onomatopoeia and rhyme, both at the end of lines and internally as in: As kingfishers catch fire, dragonflies draw flame; As tumbled over rim in roundy wells Stones ring; like each tucked string tells, each hung bell’s Bow swung finds tongue to fling out broad its name; (And look at this then Dale !!!:) I CAUGHT this morning morning’s minion, king- dom of daylight’s dauphin, dapple-dawn-drawn Falcon, in his riding Of the rolling level underneath him steady air, and striding High there, how he rung upon the rein of a wimpling wing In his ecstasy! then off, off forth on swing, As a skate’s heel sweeps smooth on a bow-bend: the hurl and gliding Rebuffed the big wind. My heart in hiding Stirred for a bird,—the achieve of; the mastery of the thing!" ** ** ** ** End of quotes! I personally like this poet a lot and his style and subject matter, it reminds me of your own, forgive me for getting carried away by the thought, I must look again at your own poem, the subject of the comment!!!! "From bright, breeze blown buttercups scenting sweet maybes," ....(might you not write may bees? -may bugs!) In some places I love this in others feel reserved, I think you have the elements of a stunning verse here, but I'm not quite completely content with it as it is, that's my opinion dear Dale for better for worse!! OOPS now I see it has spotlighted the scene and I am in the full glare of a hundred stars, but I have said my say!! Love to you pen and its magic imagery Dale from Ann.