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Twilight Entwined

Twilight Entwined Day and night highlights a symmetrical white and black,while wandering down a dew wet and moss-laden track,a mud-marked path freckled with toadstools and mushrooms,all seemingly encased within misty night-time glooms,but in such bracken-stirred woodlands, nightlife prevails,with glowing fireflies revealing sloping slugs’ slimy trails.Damp dew-licked leaves reflect their own iridescent hue,from the star’s creamy white to the river’s rainbow blue,for sapphire moonbeams illuminate bubbling brooks,while chiming, chirping crickets sing in rocky nooks,boisterous, night flying brown bats chant their ultrasonics,while yellow-speckled bugs murmur blissful oblivionics.From bright, breeze blown buttercups scenting sweet maybes,to bare-backed beetles dawdling dandily in bosoms of daisies,through to the distant humming of a darting dragonfly,and the percussion of a moon-seeking moth fluttering by,they will majestically capture you, magically in the night,spellbinding you with seductive sorcery, stunning your sight,because of all the romantic wonders that mankind can find,there are none greater than the eurhythmy of twilight entwined.
— Worldwide Freeride, Apr 21, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dale

Harmonious Rhythm ... loved your reference in the end line ... will leave it for others to discover ,... so lovely to read you again only thing I would break it up into stanza's Dale to give impact to your words love and hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Hey it be Jayne-Chloe!

Hey It be Jayne-Chloe! How the devil are you? Good I hope and recovered? Glad you got the twilight entwined part and the rhythmatics that are too and fro on purpose... you have an eye for these little things you do! Thanks for stopping on by... and apologies for not been on recently! Dale :)
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Congratulations on Spotlight

Congratulations on Spotlight ;) well done love and hugs JayCee Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

:) :) :)

Thanks JC, you're a superstar! Dale :)
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Hey it is twin!

Hey it is my Twin! How is it going Dale? Good as always I hope! Glad you liked this one, I've not been on recently myself so apologies for not visiting your page either... I'll be rectifying that in the next few days! Cheers! Dale :)
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lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dale

All I can say is, Boy you are Good. This is what I am used to in your writes. Bloody marvelous. Love Lyz. XX
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Lol Lyz...

What you are used to eh... what the open outdoor and rhythmatic heartbeat of the world... watching through lovers eyes the motion of all creatures great and small? :) Ha ha I am no better than you Lyz, but thank you so much for the comments and finding the time to review! Dale :)
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lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Bloody Well deserved Spot

Told ya, ha, ha, it is Goooooooood. Better than good. Congrats. love Lyz. XX
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Lol Lyz...

Lol Lyz... Yeah but what do i have to come up with to get a stupendious accolade from the Lavish Lyz? Neh neh de neh lol! Chaers Lyz you're great you are! True Aussie in all its glory! Dale :)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dale

I was enchanted by these lines: From bright, breeze blown buttercups scenting sweet maybes, to bare-backed beetles dawdling dandily in bosoms of daisies, through to the distant humming of a darting dragonfly, and the percussion of a moon-seeking moth fluttering by, they will majestically capture you, magically in the night, spellbinding you with seductive sorcery, stotting your sight, because of all the romantic wonders that mankind can find, there are none greater than the eurhythmy of twilight entwined. Now, what is this nonsense about not being able to write as well as I do? This piece is amazing! I loved the visuals! The only suggestion I have is to watch your spelling. I use my outgoing e-mail as a spell checker. Always, Cat
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Hey it my fave darkside writer!

Hey it is my fave darksise writer! Hope you are as well as you can be Cat! Glad you liek the place and pace of this poem... spelling I am assuming you are referring to Oblivionics which isn't quite proper english and maybe the word Stotting? Stotting is a Northern english slang words for a heavy downpour of rain, and it is also used to describe the gait of certain animals (especially deer and gazelles) .. I have changed it to stunning to make easier on the reader lol! Otherwise I can't see any spelling errors? If you can see any other please do tell me! :) Thanks as always Dear Cat for stopping and reviewing, always a delight to get a review from you! :) Dale :) PS I am still not as good a writer as you, so there lol!
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Beautiful

I concur with all of the above...wonderful write with lovely descriptions. Rosina xena465
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Heya Rosina!

Thanks for agreeing with all the other lol! No seriously thanks for dropping on by and adding some great comments... have yourself a great weekend! Dale :)
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odd molly

16 years 1 month ago

Amazing ! How wonderful and

Amazing ! How wonderful and lovely your poetry is dear Dale. I am so happy to see you in the spotlight. Congratulations ! Please never stop writing . Much Love o molly
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

All down to friends like you...

Hello Molly! Me writing like this is down to friends like you Molly, people who smile around others and give enough encouragement to get inspiration from surroundings and being able to love all freely! Thanks for that Molly, I'll never stop writing because you are here to spur me on! Dale :)
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D Sleez

16 years 1 month ago

Very Good

Description is first rate. great job
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Hey D Sleez!

Glad you could go awalking in the twilight with the world! Is that you, the rock formation near the bottom? Can't quite make you out lol! Cheers for commenting, much appreciated! Dale :)
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 1 month ago

Holy jeez!!!! Wicked write,

Holy jeez!!!! Wicked write, could see the images as clear as crystal!!! Sounds very much like a world I`d like to visit when this one is well...what it is. It takes a brilliant image maker to make a place appear so vividly in someone`s mind and you have done just that, dear Dale. And congrats on spotlight, much deserved! Peace
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Katie!

Katie! Ha not as A-W-E-Some as you, and being put in the spotlight is like when you escape from prison and the guards are trying to find you... argh they got the light on me! lol! Cheers Katie, glad you liked this one ... hope you it takes you pleasant places when you conjure up the images! Dale :)
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 1 month ago

LOL they’re coming for

LOL they're coming for you! Quick hide under my trap door, they won't find you there :) This one definitely took me to a good place, it was a very enjoyable read. Peace
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Lol Ravensnest!

Lol Ravensnest! I have agreat reciepe to give you ... take one egg, place in a pan of boiling water and add a pinch of salt! Voila we gourmet stuff at its best lol! Thanks my dear... I am not that good, I think we all ping off each other as writers on here! You're good too! Dale :)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dale

Congratulations on the spotlight position. You earned it! Always, Cat
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Hey Cat!

Hey Cat! Thanks.. personally I'd like to share the limelight with you, another great poet! Dale :)
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Whoa Dale!

Whoa Dale! Good grief, and thanks you very much! Glad you like this one, but please don't put yourself down, you're a great writer too.. must be something in the name mate lol! You write amazing stuff too... maybe we could match pens one time and come up with a double D write! :)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

A most lovely atmosphere full of night life and colour:-

Ann of Norway Dear romantic Dale of the twilight visions. A most lovely atmosphere full of night life and colour:- "for sapphire moonbeams illuminate bubbling brooks," It does, for me, however seem slightly mixed in its contents, mixed in style, but as I am no expert on judging that academically, I should just keep quiet! And yet it deserves my thoughts dear Dale. For instance:- "to bare-backed beetles dawdling dandily in bosoms of daisies," & "with glowing fireflies revealing sloping slugs’ slimy trails." the alliteration in this gives the feeling that Gerard Manley Hopkins played a part,:- (Off to read for my comment:oh boy I read of "prosody" and "Sprung rhythm"!!!) From Wikepedia "Hopkins called his own rhythmic structure sprung rhythm. Sprung rhythm is structured around feet with a variable number of syllables, generally between one and four syllables per foot, with the stress always falling on the first syllable in a foot. In reality, it more closely resembles the "rolling stresses" of Robinson's Jeffers, another poet who rejected conventional meter. Hopkins saw sprung rhythm as a way to escape the constraints of running rhythm, which he said inevitably pushed poetry written in it to become "same and tame." In this way, Hopkins can be seen as anticipating much of free verse...........He often creates compound adjectives, sometimes with a hyphen (such as dapple-dawn-drawn falcon) but often without, as in rolling level underneath him steady air.... Added richness comes from Hopkins’s extensive use of alliteration, assonance, onomatopoeia and rhyme, both at the end of lines and internally as in: As kingfishers catch fire, dragonflies draw flame; As tumbled over rim in roundy wells Stones ring; like each tucked string tells, each hung bell’s Bow swung finds tongue to fling out broad its name; (And look at this then Dale !!!:) I CAUGHT this morning morning’s minion, king- dom of daylight’s dauphin, dapple-dawn-drawn Falcon, in his riding Of the rolling level underneath him steady air, and striding High there, how he rung upon the rein of a wimpling wing In his ecstasy! then off, off forth on swing, As a skate’s heel sweeps smooth on a bow-bend: the hurl and gliding Rebuffed the big wind. My heart in hiding Stirred for a bird,—the achieve of; the mastery of the thing!" ** ** ** ** End of quotes! I personally like this poet a lot and his style and subject matter, it reminds me of your own, forgive me for getting carried away by the thought, I must look again at your own poem, the subject of the comment!!!! "From bright, breeze blown buttercups scenting sweet maybes," ....(might you not write may bees? -may bugs!) In some places I love this in others feel reserved, I think you have the elements of a stunning verse here, but I'm not quite completely content with it as it is, that's my opinion dear Dale for better for worse!! OOPS now I see it has spotlighted the scene and I am in the full glare of a hundred stars, but I have said my say!! Love to you pen and its magic imagery Dale from Ann.
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Blimey Ann you don't arf...

Blimey Ann you don't arf put some effort into your reviews! Feel free to comment how you want Ann, although we may not agree all the time (no one ever does lol!) your thoughts and impressions as a fellow writer are taken on board and if I can within my own limited skill better what i have written from then that is what we are all trying to achieve here... to get better at what we like doing! You know what Ann, I have never heard of Gerard Hopkins, but after reading the quotations you have provided here, i'll be seeking out his work to ponder upon. Thank you ever so much for your input Ann, it is much appreciated and it is taken on board... I am usually slow to modify things (except typos and the like!) but only because I like to sit down tweak everything as a whole, in the hope that the entire poem sits better in its entirety. You're a great reviwer! Dale :)