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COITUS OR MAKING LOVE

COITUS OR MAKING LOVE 

 

 

Now you have planted your seed and it has taken root and spreads 

through all my senses filling my mind with the joy of union. It is as 

if we have found the dwelling place of gods where the all is so 

excruciatingly wonderful that life takes on a new dimension and is 

more whole.

 

This life where the contemplation of the mundane is personified in an 

act so full of bliss, ones ego is swallowed up in its fresh vigour as it  

screams it’s fervour in the heart and all essences flow freely about, 

all cells communicate with each other in a choir of such beauty that 

one could die in it.

 

For this bliss must be the ultimate goal of our nature, this so extreme 

joy revealing the understanding of life’s meaning which is in the end the 

simple act of making love. What more wonderful in this human world can 

be greater than this experience? No creed of conduct can surpass that 

of intimate communion with another, and some translate this into the 

act of faith an imagined outside fantasy that is conjured up by our 

fickle brains to steer our minds with the drug of extreme delight. 

Hence all the jolly over happy religious people who never stop 

smiling, and trying to tell all others to come with them on their 

imagined journey to an idealistic heaven somewhere outside themselves. 

 

Whereas heaven is within our own hearts, expressible by our lives, our 

meetings with our fellow beings, the love and sympathy, harmony and 

discord that, crashing between us, make up a balanced peace in our 

consciousness.

 

No more nor less is the fervent aim of all life. Be it a human an 

insect or a bird, the area we live in is our home and there we nurture 

the quality of that life in whatever way we are equipped to do so. The 

genes dictating so much from our forefathers and our animal cells not 

always to our satisfaction. But that’s what we’ve got and we have to 

make the best of it.

 

We are. 

And if we are in danger or great pain, we question our worth, but 

somehow despite all ills, our spirit, or whatever it is that gives us 

life in the first place, wills us on to live. The why of that fact is 

the strangest contemplation. Why does all wish to live? We don’t know 

and we never shall.

 





— Nordic cloud, Apr 21, 2010

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

I need a man!

Your descriptions of making love is tempting. I did feel like that once-upon-a-time, but alas I haven't met anyone for a while to re-light my fire...Great stuff Ann. Rosina xena465
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Patricia_legacy

16 years 1 month ago

hi Ann

Great write. Says it like it is.
Mark

Mark

16 years 1 month ago

Eye catching

and thought provoking.. what matters but the moments? devine or innervines it's both good I think :) You might consider - Why do all wish to live? ;) Mark Resilient Flexibility RUN; when there seems to be no answer common sense will not speak, so run - -go running..
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

Well it is about love

Well it is about love isn't it Ann, wonderful. A little frantic in the read, but full of... love! Glad you posted it in the stream. Julie D.D.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

I think it is about ecstasy

Ann of Norway Love creates the ecstasy in us, love in religion creates the ecstasy in us, they are the same ecstasy? I am not exactly sure what you mean by 'frantic' as it hasn't the least element of that word in it for me, perhaps it is rather your feelings on reading it that colour your vocabulary to contain just that word, the act of love doesn't have to be at all frantic, it can be also serenely gentle and slow depending on the expression of it in each person. I have edited it a little if you meant a little unclear here or there as I agree with that. This has provoked thought for me and that is fun, thank you all for that. That's why you, Jayne, said send it on the stream!!!! Love to you all and specially to Julie as it is your comment I am replying, Ann in the woods! AND your cat there will demonstrate it every time you touch her/him yes!!!!
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

i am sad

i am sad people give u 3 and 4 stars i know they know not what harm they do no not to u but themselves thats true . when will ur nay turn to aye do tell me too LOVED 5500000 STARS FOR UUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

deleted

deleted sorry i dont know how to delete others please forgive my errors if any good bye
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

the sad commment

was it meant for me a dying wood pecker thats what i be my regrets i shant say any more as i did before on hearing from u . well why wait i am deleting all.. my regards as usual loved once
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

o annanya

to really be only what our genes dictate? no annanya. we are much larger and much smaller than we know. we are a whole that can experience through the part using the filters of the manifest we inhabit we wish to live for we understand experience gives knowledge our true home is a place of bliss and peace that "passeth all understanding" sexual love gets us only partway there. lol judanne xxxx
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Why does any living thing wish to live.

Ann of Norway "You might consider - Why do all wish to live? ;) Mark" I wasn't considering human beings as the only important element, material, objects, whatever, on this tiny globe of earth I meant ALL living matter, the why, why it wants to live, I cannot think that it is because it wishes further knowledge of life. in a hurry will be back love Ann
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

every living thing, yes

a purpose of the spirit of all living things is to gather knowledge the driving force of the Great Spirit is to know itself. love judy xxx
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Now I am back from the woods!!!!

Ann of Norway "our true home is a place of bliss and peace that “passeth all understanding”
sexual love gets us only partway there. lol 
judanne
" SEXUAL !!! Ah I see you have removed that word, or have I seen right? Sexual is a norm-loaded anthropomorphic word, one spurned on by the old prudes of religions as unnatural satisfaction of the desires that in themselves are the desires instigated by natures own pattern of reproduction; it descries the two genders that can in modern times produce offspring. Long ago, in the beginning of life on this planet, there was only bacteria; these in time, reproduced themselves, producing offspring, or mutations of exactly the same form and character, the same genes, identical; as the bees and the ants have still this capacity, producing workers for the hive, or ant heap. When did gender come into it? When cells gathered together, maybe like the primitive cells Arthur Koestler describes in his "The Roots of Coincidence", where running out of food they gather to from an cylindrical shape that can crawl to another area where there is more food, there to divide into individuals again and forage for their own food separately. This gathering of cells developed into a bigger unit of life eventually becoming a society of cells and so on; it is in this time that gender becomes an issue, I don't know much about that: when there became a male and a female, some animals still reproduced themselves and have the male and the feminine within their make up. This led to what we call natural selection, those who were strongest were chosen to reproduce, the best characteristics chosen to carry on our species into the future. Why all this is, the question, why did it go on. As I walked in the woods today my eye was caught by the twisting of two trees around each other, going in an anti-clockwise direction as all trees do in this hemisphere, this motion made me think that all in the world is guided invisibly by the pull of the earths magnetism and that is what is being manifested in these two trees so clearly. Then all like is movement, nothing is ever still, it all revolves, evolves and continues forever doing so. The movement of the DNA spiral is continuous, how beautifully the thoughts fell into one another as if trying to describe to me the reason for life ever going on developing and changing subtlely as it goes, the earth spinning so fast, the waters falling in its atmosphere sinking into the earth and rising again to fall yet again; the ageing of ourselves as we return to the earth where we came from in the first place, it was such a lovely thought and excited me in my discovery of a clearer look at the whole of life (I avoid the word creation as it is too loaded by the religions of the world as it implies some kind of creator). And this bit I wrote to a dear friend on the subject:- OOOO I can see you're not with me here perhaps dear R, I would not wish to stir your faith in a God if he exists, but for me he is a figment of man's imagination, and as such he plays his role, a good roll mostly, but his power does not give him the strength to overcome the nature of the universe which goes on and on quite without the influence of this race we call man, who have been on its surface, earth for so SHORT a time in its history that it is absurd to think of him as anything greater in the scheme of things, than the ant, the bird or the flowers of the field, all made up of the same cells we have come from the same source and will probably go back to that source eventually probably too by some disaster that will swallow this strangely beautiful planet earth as if it never even existed. Amen. Ann.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

the question was

why do we want to live wasn't it? we were talking about knowledge the love bit was an offshoot (and i never edited sexual - it's still there, that's what your poem is talking about....) lol judyanne
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Is it the gathering of knowledge

Ann of Norway Is it the gathering of knowledge that drives the animal and the insect, how do we know what they think? How do we know what knowledge really is, knowing what? annanya Love to you judyanne you have inspired many thoughts in me, and that is wonderful, I was thinking all the time I was walking n the woods after your first comment. Also studying nature to find some answers and she helped m to find some too, magic world.
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Ann

We are the merest brush of breath in time ... wonderful poem I read it in stream and thought that this ones one of your best .... its needs a little formating but that can come later ... loved it love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
Esker

Esker

16 years 1 month ago

live for poetry

i have twenty years left (be I lucky and recieve more) I love poetry maybe it shall live for a time and other poets will be born and write their beauty over mine Beautiful Poem Ann Esker~
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Poetry then is your ecstasy

Ann of Norway Your presence is a treat your poetry too, we love your thoughts and they will be there in the human mind for a very long time they cannot die out even though we shall. Each moment recorded as with a camera the reality we see the poem records the reality we feel. Thank you Esker Mr. Boxes of poems my love to you as aye Ann.
M

Mariposa

16 years 1 month ago

Glad you wrote this poem

Like Xena says, I need a man too, your poem has awoken the beast within me! You make very good points about intimacy and the difference between coitus and love-making...ah, to be in someone's arms... Your friend in pen, Jhena
L

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ann

Jayne gave you the right advice, I am pleased she did. Very expressive and a joy to read. Love to you dear one. Lyz. XX
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

How lovely to see you here Lyz

Ann of Norway How lovely to see you here Lyz and thank you for your words this has prompted debate and that is always interesting isn't it. Love to you too Ann XX
L

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Ann

Lol, yes, and we do love a debate. You always give your all in your writes and this one is no exception. Love and wishes, Lyz. XX
R

Rakshasa

16 years 1 month ago

Indeed.

Wonderful Write. Im feeling it completely.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you Rakshasa

Ann of Norway Oh what does that stand for Rakshasa, it sounds as if it were a section of a raga and the picture you send of yourself fits that idea with its harmonies and shapes intertwining like love too!!! Love to you from Ann
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Just thoughts Ann

Ann of Norway WHY LIFE Why do we want to live, the why, the big enormous why, even when in dire pain, we cling to life, even when half dead, we cling to life, when one would think it spent, a relief to fade into a bliss of nothingness far greater tempts our thoughts; the birds and beasts have no religion, they don't think of God, they don't believe they rise again, they have no rod or staff to trust them in their hour of need, so why do we, of self same genes and cells, create our heavens and our hells, when all is clear and simple, we come, we go like driven snow, take part and then depart. Amen.
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Ann! How is the Derwegian one?

Ann! How is the Derwegian one? Sorry i have not been about of late but I have been busy! This is a great write full of energy and bursting at the seems with verve and passion of thw world... love is a drug, Ann it can gives us both highs and lows ... almost like a heaven or a hell! If we could all unify and love all then it'd would be so great but... like you said the initimate love of indiviuals is greatest feeling of all, a bliss incomparable to anything else. It is those animalistic urges that drive the world... but some people love to love you, othera love to be in love. The latter are the ones you want to avoid! :) A great thought provoking write that is well expressed and written Ann. Dale :)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

How wise you are Dale.

Ann of Norway But you left out the reason for the write too, the fact that ecstasy of many types is a drug, religion being a potent one too, conning man from studying the important things that concern man here and now on earth, in sanity, where there are no guides and where we have to find our own way, or is that too blasphemous here, I beg your pardons if that is what you feel! Thank you Dale for your nice comment, yours Ann :)
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 1 month ago

Lol my Dear Ann!

Lol my Dear Ann! Someone once said to that when we are awake we are really dreaming and when we are asleep we are really alive! Why? Because you can explore your sub-concious thoughts without any boundries! Yes anything that deters from the senses is bad... Religion is one of the most common reason that people fight each other.. conflicting beliefs and all... but in reality it is just an excuse, a cover for prejudice, hate and the write to be abusive in some method or other. You are so right Ann, and I do agree with what you are saying... to find what we seek we need to look into ourself rather looking at outside influences. Politicians are another one of those drug like characters that try and induce you to their way of thinking... like a door to door salesman, selling something that they believe in, also much like street preacher too. Ann, I do so love your train of thought because it is very universal and wil not be chided by those who seek to topple others for power and influence. You're a veyr clever lady with very solid views :) Dale :)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

O wow someone who understands, Dale.

Ann of Norway Yep that's JUST IT; that says it in a nutshell and you have the same feeling about the politicians and all the con men of the world, the so-called authority freaks of society who think they know it all and when asked a pertinent question try to cover it up with long winded rubbish. Yes if there were no religions the differences between us would, in principal be none, and we would feel as one brotherhood on earth, but no man wasn't made to live in peace so it seems sadly. But what a lot of bloodshed and terror has resulted from nearly all the religions of the world, drop them and join hands. I feel like a human in the world and am neither British,nor German, nor Indian, name it, I feel just like one more human being and treat others as such too, I would not die for my country, I might for my closest family, but I don't know! All the patriotism and nationalism l feel are grossly exaggerated and lead to discrimination which I hate, as I have said before I only discriminate against those who themselves discriminate. Vive la liberté. Freedom of speech. However I do not either discriminate those who believe in this or that, they take their own choice and respect that. Phew!!! Thank you Dale for your understanding and comment, yours with love Ann.