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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Apr 19, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

BETRAYAL


Leadwillingly,unprotesting - (pulsating with excitement )


by the handto wherever he would go. Trusting the flowof her lover juices.

 The land of milk -to be his honey. Abruptly halted.Slapped,

by a cold mutilating blow.His disdain -her death row.Her painhis:
"I don't really know -Now  go!"



BjR  20 March '10
— Bonitaj, Apr 19, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni

I don't quite know what to say. I enjoyed the play on words with milk and honey. I admire the style in which the poem is constructed. All in all, I very much like it's unique structure. Always, Cat
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

thank you Cat

I wasn't really aware of "structure" as such - "just did it" ! Glad you liked it and that you stopped by! Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni

I echo the comments above and add this little oddity surprised me ... curious write but i loved it love JayCee Btw whats your pic of cant see the full thing ?? lol Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Hey Jay-Cee!

Loved it - the pic that is! Since I'm going to be away - I thought it most apt - it says KEEP ME IN YOUR MIND'S EYE! Couldn't fit the whole thing in though I would've loved to! Will be in the States for 3 weeks - but will try to pop in occasionally ;0 Gonna miss you guys too much! Cheers Boni
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Hey Indi

What happened to you? Or is it only women who can appreciate these sentiments? ;) B
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pamela

16 years 1 month ago

Dear B., Clever write. I

Dear B., Clever write. I really liked the turn around. It was a bit startling. I suppose that was intended. I liked the play on words as well. P.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

THanks Pam!

This was written as a direct rebuttal to someone - in the moment! Glad it made sense to "some more than others" (see above;) Cheers Bonita j
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Mariposa

16 years 1 month ago

Ouch!

Great rebuttal, I felt your pain in this encounter ended most unkindly by the guy. Now he feels his pain as he reads your poem that all the world can see. Linked in Ink -Jhena