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Only Heaven Knows [Reeditted

Only Heaven Knows

Your thoughts are really

Beautiful and unique

Please do keep it up

As always and ever before

Rise and surprise

Go hand in hand

Veiled in a clouded ashy sky

As we have one

Smearing the continent

The world looks up aghast

Towards heaven

Where and how this did happen?”

Here I’m struck in the nude!

Betwixt white cloudy soiled sheets

Between Heaven

And Earth beneath...

— loved, Apr 19, 2010

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Critiques

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Hello Loved

Interesting how you've tried to weave in a little fantasy and fun with the reality of the Volcanic fall out! good theme! Humorously ended! Bonita j 1st Line - Heaven ONLY KNOWS ... ;)

loved

16 years 1 month ago

NEW FLAVOUR

THE FLAVOUR HAS BEEN ALTERED WITH THE AMENDMENT U MAY REREAD THANKS TO ANN MA'AM

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Ann of Norway "...beautifully".........something, adjective for what you say next! You could just cut out the 'Ah.' "When the world does so".......does so WHAT? Cut out this line perhaps so as to avoid saying world twice. "As we have one"...one WHAT? "Why this disaster Oh God!" God has no power over nature. Bizarre ending not easy to explain. The subject is good. Yours Ann

loved

16 years 1 month ago

thanks

as amended

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Yes I agree. I can’t add

Yes I agree. I can't add any more Loved...great write. Rosina xena465

loved

16 years 1 month ago

thanks

pl easedoread as amended

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

Hope it helped.

Ann of Norway Now its almost perfect and if you change this I shall award some stars if you wish, not always keen on having to decide I care not about stars and spotlights. But everything in this world is turned into a competition which I am not all that fond of, in some cases it is a game for fun, but if it hurts others it is not good. "Where and how this did happen?" how did this happen its not more poetic with the odd way round!! Yours Anna Ma'am.

loved

16 years 1 month ago

aye aye ma'am

It’s been done stars I don’t care for as long as you read me That’s why I want your comments. I am otherwise an author of three books and one last in the making ‘’THE HUMAN MIND’’ You are definitely more accomplished than I and I would like to thank thee Twill be nice if you permit me To add on as a buddy, For your poetry is exquisite My thoughts alike, But I am blunter and not shy. So I request you Ma’am Does your mind apply? And Let me in your eyes stand by. For you chose to read my poem ‘’Wait for me’’ that was the last of the daylight I was about to see And In memory of A nearly forgotten soul, I am sure you shall hold What so ever does remain? If it may be Just to console. LOVED BY ONE AND ALL .

Nordic cloud

16 years 1 month ago

I've nay done yet!

Ann of Norway "Betwixt white soiled sheets That can’t really be welcome." ...... I don't really understand how white soiled sheets cannot be welcome! Do they have feelings too? If this was an absurd poem it would possibly work but it is a directly told tale; also if no one knew about a volcano we wouldn't know what you were talking about from the words here and there. And how many heavens are there? Good heavens I hope I do not offend. From Ann.

loved

16 years 1 month ago

GOOD HEAVENS

THe poem was started YES as an absurd thought on some ones erratic comment then I twisted my mind and got ..... good heavens interpolated too. thanks hopefully now its good heaven and only all about VOLCANO NOW IT SHOULD DO