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THREE SEEDS OF A FLOWER - Message to all
Three seeds of a flower
Wilt not stand alone this hour
A father and son together, as one
Awakens the flower of mornings sun
There is love and compassion
No empathy ever lacking
A father gives, unto his son
Liken a blossom, a flower begun
Three seeds are still there
Showering in loves spirited care
Gazing upon a blossom of two
Feeling her, watching over you
The love of a father, dedicated to his son
It all begins, the new day has begun
No other love so precious and true
Three seeds of a flower awakens with you
I send this poem to all of you
Prayers for healing, soon speed through
The love of a father taking care of his son
His gracious, compassion, together as one
For all your care and all your love
The Lord shines down from heavens above
A flower soon shall bloom
To soften days of doom and gloom
Mother is there too, with all her cares
She sees the burdens, which you now share
She is not there in person, she is not to-ground
Just trust in the Lord, her spirit's around
For there sprouts three petals
All the seeds have been settled
One from heaven, two others from earth
Three seeds of a blossom, a love from birth
My thoughts on this poem now.
This poem was written for a father tending a sick child. Little did I know it was not the truth. I will not delete it as the story has been told so I dedicate this poem I wrote to any and all you single fathers who tend to their sick child, whether it be son or daughter.
For in life there are many men that have had to take the responsibility of being the sole caretaker for their children after Mother has gone whether due to a divorce or a passing or abandament. This poem shall stand on its own merit, only the dedication has been changed. I would not be telling the truth if I said that this poem left me also speechless of it's comments but I want you all to know I appreciate how you critiqued this poem and not so much the actions of anyone here.
I have learned alot and the one thing for sure--- never to disclose any personal information in a private message unless you know for sure that is the person to whom you really want to converse with. The internet is just that an inter net. Be careful in whatever site you visit and share. This is now a closed chapter in my book and would like to personally thank each and every one of you for your genuine and heartfelt feedback of this poem. I did put my heart into it and it did sadden me a bit. I hold no grudge, I hold no hate, for poems and stories I like to make. Whether from the heart or the mood, or just being me.
Let us go forward and continue the writing we are all here for. I thank you so much.
Love and Peace
Magics Mona
xoxoxo
Critiques
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Rex is our new member here
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
If anyone
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
lol
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Thanks Ephy
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
What if Rex were Kal in
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Blazing Saddles
seabhac
16 years 1 month ago
Ha ha ha ha
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
I am fucking stunned …
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Jayne,The lesson, as it
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Anna
xena465
16 years 1 month ago
True Colours revealed once again Kal...develishly cruel
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
That’s why I love Advaita,
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
Stunning work!
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
my next poem
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
Sigh. I’m taking a much
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
no comment to Kal
Nordic cloud
16 years 1 month ago
As a religious poem this is well written
mantiscepter
16 years 1 month ago
Three
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
Kal
Candlewitch
16 years 1 month ago
Dear Mona
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
well said
panaella
16 years 1 month ago
Agree...a sensitive write
shirley harrison
16 years 1 month ago
Mona I will always give 5 stars
chumfin
16 years 1 month ago
WHITE QUEEN , BE YOUR SELF.
magics02
16 years 1 month ago
Yes and I am just me