Satan's Realm

I felt that ! Not a good experience but a strong one non the less ! Mark Resilient Flexibility

Scary stuff here, for me, the use of capitols at every line change was a distraction, especially since most are sentences, that seem to need to be said without pauses. I would re-format this one to direct the readers pauses, and maybe add a little power to the ending... welcome to the torment you've never dreamed of... or not, just suggestions. Hope all is good with you Richard

I would call it: Hell hath no fury like the torment of your mind. Thanks for the inspiration. Poem forthcoming. You write good stuff, Paul (thanks also to Richard for his keen eye/ear/heart/mind.) Peace and Light, Anna "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles

the subway riders on a full moon ha ha just kidding excellent descriptive elements here Paul you are growing as a Poet amazing to see your progression I am studying bible wont expound or describe but its very exciting to know of the things of the past non National Geographic or FM radio late night cursive pitch So great to see young talent as you change into a more culmative expressive poet Esker~

I have to echo the Moonman, and Esker, guess I should get here earlier. lol You know how I feel about word capitolizing all of your lines Paul. And I think that it drags a little all broken up, not that it is all bad in its current lay out. And although it is an apt title, seems a tad commercial, impersonal. In my opinion. Julie D.D.

As the poem stands it is very effective. I felt the ending to be a bit weak, only my opinion I expected more force in the ending. Chrys