FED UP

Paltry pieces pried,from a clenched fistPetulance and parsimonyHigh -On the donor's list. Why not bitethe meagre handthat feeds,a starving wenchin such desperate need? Wrest a morsel, devour the arm shoulder no responsibilityfor inflicting such harm -To one so impervious to a mere Beggar's charms. BjR 17 April '10

— Bonitaj, Apr 16, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

spot on!

I just started playing with it - haven't yet ript it to shreds - the other body parts that is ;) Thanks Boni

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Right KAL!

Here is the re-mix and it's going to be as good as it gets. Not quite as vicious as you would've liked but a lady like way of say - FED UP! ;) CHeers BOni

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni

I have read the revisions and I seriously think its still lacking something Boni ... cant put my finger on it but I will come back tomorrow love and hugs Jayne-Chloe (Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll)

loved

16 years 1 month ago

scared

scared to comment having read other's lament

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Ah Jayne-Chloe!

sometimes the words just roll off the tongue - could be this muse is in the end stages of dying.... hence the lack of good, cogent inspiration. I feel drained on this one - so not even going to bother ;) THanks for your input though ;) Boni

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

Aha - light bulb moment!

Here's where I see the error of my ways: FOR INFLICTING SUCH HARM (UPON) ONE SO IMPERVIOUS (TO)! These darned propositions can be so trying sometimes ;) Thanks for the corrections, your astute eye has caught me out again! lol Boni