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xraycat
Apr 15, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Sweet things

Today you made my heart soar, and filled it full of hope, Candy canes and rainbow drops, strawberry and cream rope. Marshmellew cushions break my fall as i swoon at your feet, The quietest of glances, and my heart just skips a beat. As candy floss clouds float over head, My thoughts remain as true, No flying saucers from outer space Or liquirice allsorts will take the place of you.
— xraycat, Apr 15, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Your poem is missing or its

Your poem is missing or its invisable lol ... sorry came for a read your title caught my eye and I found it empty if your having trouble just let me know and I will try and help if I can kind regards love Jayne-Chloe (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!
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xraycat

16 years 1 month ago

sorry, yes i am having

sorry, yes i am having trouble! no more irony just frustration! thank you, i hope you enjoy the poem when i finally manage to submit it xx
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Helloooooo finally I get to

Helloooooo finally I get to read the rhyme was tight the lines were near to perfect ... well done I cant see anything to fault ... I would have loved to have read the longer version of this one kind regards Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
judyanne

judyanne

16 years ago

what's 'naff'?

enlighten your elderly friend love xxx ps ' Marshmellew' - 'marshmellow' and 'liquirice' - 'liquorice' (xx) http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html
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xraycat

16 years ago

oh i read it to my brother

oh i read it to my brother and he thought it was crap...and said my sweet tooth had taken over my mind! i will work on it, just so happy that my poems are finally submitting, they just need a lot aof work! xx i wish i could enlighten you judy but you shine much brighter than i xx