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A Tryst with Destiny

The air was rife with pungent odor of flesh
an eerie silence wrangling my ears
hot embers, spewing through livid eyes
a racing heart, limbs morbid in fear
fists clenched, clawing at sanctity in vain
all this, and more i can't tell
for fear prevailed over anguish, disgust, dispair
cold sweat trickled down the spine
head was spinning, reeling news clips
brain more dead than alive
witnessing an eloquent destiny played live....

 
The dust settled as i trudged between mortal ruins
lungs gasping with stunted breaths
a smoky veil slowly lifted the lid
over corpses hid beneath its dark labyrinths
an act of God or in the name of God
a dazed mind failed to perceive
all this and more i couldn't tell
in the grips of loneliness i was tied
no helping hand within sight
or so i thought, till i looked up to the stars
to foretell, what fate had in store for me...


There she was, shell shocked and forlorn,
clutching her doll with all her might
eyes writ with fear, soaked in grief
too innocent to hate or forgive
with her world fallen apart like a house of cards
all belief in Angels was dusted and gone
fearing satan had stolen all love in her kitty
no one to sing, to play or make merry
no good night kisses, no bed time stories to sleep
her doll, now the only charm left with
to hug and kiss good night...


All this, and more i couldn't bear
she was a doll I had craved all my life
as i kneeled before her, her tears flowed in rapids
our eyes were locked in a tryst with destiny
my arms ached to soothe her in my warmth
she saw I had none, so she hugged me tight
a solace we had found healing our woes
she could even feel my fingers brushing her brows
tears in her eyes now rolled down my cheek
all this, and more i can't tell
for fear, our fairy tale would end...
— raj, Apr 12, 2010

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raj

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you

Thank you Licia for your appreciative words...and nomination... raj..
Shango007

Shango007

16 years 1 month ago

I’ve made some attempts at

I've made some attempts at being sublime, but your piece left me in awe.. it's kinda like surveying a place from atop a cliff and being speechless at the scene below.. very vivid...
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

feels good

thank you for your comments ...it feels good when the mood is created and the essencegets communicated... raj
xena465

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

Beautiful

Brilliant poem. It kept me reading intrestingly all the way through. Just a few typo errs maybe? an {eearie} silence wrangling my ears (eerie) fearing {satans} had stolen all love in her kitty perhaps you meant (Satan) she was a doll I had craved all life (all my life) Rosina xena465
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

appreciated..

Hello Rosina Appreciate your bringing to my notice some typos..i have duly corrected them... raj..
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

A TRYST WITH DESTINY

Those who r old enough or are historians would know that these very words were first coined by Pundit Nehru the Indian Prime Minister while taking over from the British Empire India as a first Prime Minister on the night of 15 august 1947 / lovely words have beeen given a new life . Well done loved
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

thank you for the infomation

thank you for the infomation Loved....i wasnt aware about this...purely a co-incidence that the title of the poem matches Jawaharlal Nehru's word...thank you also for your generosity in rating this poem..raj..
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magics02

16 years 1 month ago

Powerful read here

I read this in awe and need to come back to it and read again. This is a story of a war zone may I ask? The child with the doll and all that is left, very much imagery painted as one reads this, Good job here, Keep up the good works. Magics02 TIME well spent is TIME well lived
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

You are spot on Magics…yes

You are spot on Magics...yes indeed it is about a war zone scenario and about the solace the two find to discover each other ..giving hope...good to know you found it worthy to read it twice over..raj
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Sublime

Well done ... I think a few lines could be shortened and the flow smoothed out just a wee bit but its well written none the less .. and I really liked this one kind regards Jayne-Chloe (Quote:- It is a thousand times better to have common sense without education than to have education without common sense.---Robert Green Ingersoll)
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raj

16 years 1 month ago

you are most welcome to pass

you are most welcome to pass on useful tips like you have done Jay-Cee...i will keep those in mind...i consider myself ona learning curve and stand benifitted by constructive criticism...raj...