Just A Fat Guy In a Red Velvet Jumpsuit with a Sack Full of Toys

thoughts provoking more thought, good poem I only have on crit and thats the length of some of your lines if you broke some of the longer ones down I believe it would give certain lines more power ...plus its more reader friendly just a suggestion btw congrates if I read the poem right kind regards Jayne-Chloe

Yes, thought provoking indeed. By all means, dance the dance! The alternative is to sit life out? Magic? ok. One day, i was returning from lunch and happened across a dead male goldfinch who had run into a window and most likely broke it's neck. a co-worker saw it and said "what are you going to do about it?" i said nothing , but decided to wait to see if nature needed to use it in its own way. the next morning i got to work early, prepared to get rid of the bird should need be. it was still there. so i buried it . two hours later, while outside at break, a female goldfinch landed on my pantleg for a brief second and looked right at me in a sort of quizzical way then flew off. never had that happen before or since. have you? does it have meaning? these are the things that inspire us to write. so.... the fact that you are doing so means you are not indifferent. please continue. R. (p.s. the suit is very thick double layer wool worn over wonderfully soft linen layers.)

Live the dream!