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un souffle des cheveux loin

There's a moonbeam on your shoulder.....

I watch the fingers of my mind,
touch you softly,
caressing
there's a little boy in your temples,
greying
and a sanctuary found in your heart,
beating

a breath away
 
Poet,
I love the strength of your lines
as you carry me across the threshold of ecstasy
like mountains, walking
sepia dreams
mute with a wilderness, wide
clouds in our eyes
falling
like rain,
filling
seas of discovery.

Uncharted islands, just a hair's breath away.





 






 
 
— Kailashana, Apr 10, 2010

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mum

Standing Ovation ... Bow love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

so beautiful anna

'like mountains walking towards sepia dreams' - such visions you conjure love judy
yenti

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Anna

A beautiful poem and so many feelings there well written, Yours Ian.T PS:- This is probably one of the most imaginative feeling poems that has graced our presence for a long time, just need more of these.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Oh in love, in love you are, you are.

Ann of Norway Oh in love, in love you are, you are. Do you have long hair? I wish I could see it! So ephemeral, so delicately perfumed, yet with depths of pungency in the sea of your mind. So beautiful, devoted. Ann's love to you Anna and Barry.
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Words expressed beautifully

Words expressed beautifully from a good-hearted kind woman. I love it Kailashana. Rosina xena465
lou

lou

16 years 2 months ago

Reminds me

The first line reminds me a little of a line from a Disney film, but the poem is beautiful. What I would say though is, the last line does'nt quite fit,instead of saying a hairs breath away, maybe you could say something like just out of reach ? A lovely poem. Lou x
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RobertKnott

16 years 2 months ago

Ahhhhh... trepidation-

anticipation! Blessed be thee Discovery! What do think you didn't get right? The cat's got my tongue and probably will do better with it than I ever could. Wanna hear a funny thing? Recently a computer asked my age. Required fields and all that. My birthday was input, and the computer said i was 255 years old. Funny huh? Go ahead.... laugh! It's not easy being around. :)