THE MASQUERADE OF CONSEQUENCES

I have seen the end for consequences I have made

My choices lead to places barren and sterile my results are in

Flesh and blood, to be human will it be accepted and

Appreciated for only the heart that I hold

Love of purpose or the needed love! will not be

Barren sterile consequences I have seem to placed in

Someone else

Question, what can someone else?

Give me that I don’t really own

Is it the kiss on the cheek, the cold nights I sleep alone?

Or knowledge for my own masquerade

My satire of sterile barren night accepted

A scenario that my love finds its way to unfold

However, I want to hear spoken words

I love you verse cold barren and alone

And the embrace of touch

Are not the consequences I place in someone else?

— press, Apr 08, 2010

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Press

You have put a great deal into this piece and it is great, the only thing that seems just out a little is the flow, the themem is great and the words you use are also great but the order there is tripping me up, I like the pic of you there with someone, they seem to have the ability to lift you to heaven, your work has become great as you stay with us and I have missed a few of your pieces I feel but will look into it, have a great day,Yours Ian.T

press

16 years 2 months ago

Hey teach Ian T

This pic is my mother and father I know, we look just alike but I change my profile pic when my died on 12-12-2009 Ian I think I am transforming but I haven't fully understood the reasons of this transformation the mechanic behind me as a poem evolving. So maybe that why my flow is out of order LOV2U PRESS

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Press

Just let the words lay on the paper then boot their backsides until they ring with the stories you wish to tell. Use Notepad and play with the lines as I do when Editing or writing something I have just put down in a hurry, this is hurry without notepad:- The sun in its stillness sank into the ocean, I could only wish to hang it back up so that the day I had was repeated,-: You see this is rough then just put on note pad which I wont do, time is pinching me. There you can play at your own time, have a look at Orgami and try to write in that style for a poem it is fun short lines and lots of power....... The Picture is lovely and deserves a beautiful poem from you those looks and the laughter say so many things, You take care out there, Yours Ian.T

magics02

16 years 1 month ago

ImPress..Ive

Another nice one and I agree with Yenti here also and now I know who the picture is of, Mom and Dad, the best teachers we will ever have. Long live our great parents and grandparents. Inspired Love, Magics02 TIME well spent is TIME well lived