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chrisbyrne
Mar 31, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Small moves

Breath slow. move in time.
In. Out, so hard to trace.
Love the change, mind. No place!

I am me, you can see.
Want, lust, need.
I exist in breath outside space.

Move in time, all is well.
Cold fact can shape;
All the forms to come.

I love life, time indeed.
need, forfill, centre. See.
Flowing out, I am me!


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Draki

16 years 1 month ago

I like this straight away

I like this straight away for it's simplicity and compactness. It's just about being, or at least a being's experience of being! I didn't realise until after a few reads that you were meant to be conveying the essence of tai-chi, but I was put in mind of Buddhist philosophy, and the Tao, so you conveyed well. I suppose I'm trying to say something relevant, when really I just simply really liked this, and I think I got it. foresee/fulfill = forfill = create your own reality : manifest destiny.