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sutton
Apr 07, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I'd be Mo

 Dreading the words of the past 

Though they were so long ago

I don't know how they last

 

Once high on the mast

But since taken a blow

Dreading words of the past

 

TIme goes so fast

Memories bring me low

I don't know how they last

 

Hopes and dreams are mashed

Been sent to dealth row

Dreading words of the past

 

In a movie, we are cast

Like Curly, Larry and Mo

I don't know how they last

 

Last pay cheques bin cashed

Now it's time for me to go

Dreading words from the past

I don't know how they last

 

 


— sutton, Apr 07, 2010

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yenti

yenti

16 years 2 months ago

Sutton

Once again a good piece and then the last two lines need to be changed around unless it is deliberate but if so then the reason evades me, otherwise a good little poem, Yours Ian.T
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sutton

16 years 2 months ago

it's

supposed to be one of the poems for the contest this mounth, can't remember the name of it but pretty sure thats the way they want to arrange it, but me not sure,
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anonymous1

16 years 1 month ago

Villanelle.

And a good one too! I would change the spelling of 'bin' to been. Lisa
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 1 month ago

Howdy Sutton, So glad we

Howdy Sutton, So glad we got this months entries listed so I could catch your write. Very raw and written from a basic place, that comes across well actualy. Not always, but here it works. You do have the ryhme pattern down. Dealth - death cheques - checks I believe are misspellings. Good write and good luck on the contest! Julie D.D.