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Found Out

I found out where I'm from
due to a response I made, the other day,
and you could see my past, bubble out of my eyes.

It even temporarily blinded my vision
until I finally realized,
that I was brought up to respond in that manner,

and I was led down a path to where I'm currently at,
and gone were my inhibitions, in the night
for it felt like springtime in my heart.

I had finally found out about myself
and about who I am, thanks to you,
and how you make me want to be a better man;

and I found out some other things, too;
for instance, how much I need your light rain to wash over me
because of how pure you make me feel.

You have made my life so passionate, and focused
that I found out you are the magic in my rainbow,
and your heartbeat is the sound of my thunder;

which I found out, is necessary for me to remain calm,
because the melody of your song carries me to your arms,
and allows me to lose myself inside your storm;

where I remain dry, and warm, and very grateful
that our voices can share the harmonies of your song,
allowing me to find out, that I like the me I am.....when I'm with you !

— docmaverick, Apr 07, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Doc

this is really lovely but I felt there were too many 'ands' in the third and fourth stanza's I thought it would sound better with one or both removed love and hugs JayCee
docmaverick

docmaverick

16 years 1 month ago

Thanx, for your candidness....

...I wrote this piece at three distinct times, and I couldn't quite zero in on the "mood" of the poem...it's "attitude" as it were....but, I still finished it, and posted it. Maybe, I should've rethought that, eh ? "Write on"! sincerely, #{:-{)}8==== docmaverick.
M

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Doc just what the doc ordered:)

I liked this write of yours and it flowed nicely. I also agree with Seren on the ands as I have did that also in alot of mine and went back to tweak them and you would be surprised how nice it reads and flows better without repetition of the same words. Its all a learning thing for me too. A great write Doc!! Love, Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.