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fire breather

when the night
stained us both black

I saw you from the distance

recognized the red blaze
pin point
edge of your cigarette
glaringly precede
your silhouette

and once I stepped inside

you told me you met your man
fire spinning, 
twirling torches balancing skin, breath,
and flame

once again I was too late
and simply mistook your
tumbled locks of
volcano
hair for being
tulip colored

If only
I could tango past him,

leaving your fury blissful
brave,
untamed.
— whitetea, Apr 07, 2010

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Chrystos, Mark Strand, Adrienne Rich, Naomi Shihab Nye, Rachel M. Simon, Donald Justice, Mary Oliver, Nikki Giovanni, Alice Walker, Bukowski, Mary Lambert

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whitetea

whitetea

16 years 2 months ago

Yes

There was a desire for intimacy. Maybe it is too subtle, I will consider that. Good to see you again.
whitetea

whitetea

16 years 2 months ago

>

Um, if you read this, would you consider reading my first draft/ first revision of this? I am not sure if this draft was a step forward or backward :(
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

a step forward

the only word that encompasses your "body of work" is evocative. There always feels to be more there, tantalisingly just out of sight. As in this one, love it. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

I agree with Jess on this

I agree with Jess on this one ... as someone who holds back ... I can feel you are as well at times ... but thats not a bad thing love and hugs Jayne-Chloe (http://www.neopoet.com/forum/36627-meet-n-greet-live-chat-thurs-apr-15th-9-11-pm-ny-est-host-poewriter58-welcome-new-member#comment-175177) ... Be there ~!~!~!