The Process

Ann of Norway "Physical death, the false nature of humanity" This bit I didn't understand? I will be back though!! Love Ann

It makes one think doesn't, I like it though it feels like real life, From a weird POV that is, Well who's normal these days, Carry on; Roseshade

speak this aloud to some very stoned hippies and I am sure it will be loudly applauded. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible

Stefan, Jess offered a critique of your work, not a judgment of your person. Jess is a direct individual and talented and has a lot to offer. When Jess comments on my work, I listen. I may not implement everything he says, but I listen because I want my work to be better and if Jess' direct commentary can provoke me to be better, I will gladly take it and I have. Jess has given you his opinion about the way your poem presents and you have responded with a personal judgment about Jess. This is not a productive discussion. Now could Jess have modified his statements to be something like: "Stefan, the use of language in this piece is awkward and appear more pretense than information, as if you were presenting divine and unique knowledge to the unwashed masses. This is the type of message that normally does not play well in a group of peers and in all honesty reminds me of something that would sound profound only if the audience were under the influence of their favourite drug." Sure, but that's not his style and uses a lot more words and, let's face it, says exactly the same thing. This is a poetry workshop and part of the lesson is to grow a thicker skin and not take every comment that is not praise as a personal attack. If you disagree with Jess, and I do not know if you do as your reply has nothing at all to do with his comment, then you need to request him to elaborate on specific points. You need to enter into a dialogue as to why he feels the message is not coming through and why you feel it is. Now, this is only a discussion you can have if you want to participate in the workshop aspect of Neopoet. If you are here to present your work, you should just ignore all comments that are not praise and move on. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

Where have you been and I just stopping by to say I really like this one and have missed seeing your writes in here. Hope all is well with the kids and please visit soon. This is the part of this poem of yours that I liked and speaks alot here The inability of mankind to break free From the matrix of mind, fixed structures Concrete highways to a lifetime of imprisonment The inability to think outside the box Wow blew that one off the roof, I really do miss your work and hope to see you. Love and Peace to you Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived

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