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Come Out Of The Hiding

Come out of the hiding
All you've been fighting
Darkened eyes, graying place
Time to take a look at its face

What are you hiding from
Nothing's left in that box
From a withering soul
Many a story to be told

Come out of the hiding
Banishing tears of cryings
Blanketed veils covered you
Vanish the feelings sad and blue

Be gone the smoldering fires
Ember lights glow a new tomorrow
From all that was hidden
Let it be gone and forgiven

Come out of the hiding
All you've been fighting
Beckon the light, the soul awakes
Today's a new day, make the break.

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— magics02, Apr 05, 2010

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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Reflects

I know I will come back to this one for something is not sitting tweakingly upon it. Thanks for the read.... Mona xoxox Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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partacidcharm

16 years 2 months ago

i like this. i like the

i like this. i like the message and the meaning behind it. what do you mean in the line that goes "Vanish the feelings too worn of blue" ? m
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Meaning(s)

Like to vanish those feelings too worn of blue. the feelings of blue meaning depressed feelings, worn out from the bluess I am glad you like the message in this one, as I was thinking along alot of lines as I wrote it. Thank you also for the visit! Magics02 xoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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sutton

16 years 2 months ago

i like

makes me want to get up in the morning a go for a jog
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

How are you Sutton

Thanks for the visit. Sorry I haven't graced your writes lately. I have alot of catching up to do I see. Glad to see you and love the hat!! Love Magics02 Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

I am on my way out but caught this one before I logged out .. I liked your prayer but something wasnt sitting right with me either will come back when I get home and have a second look it could be? that in my hurry I stumbled but I will be back later on love JayCee
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks JC

Yes I been revisting a couple times tonite this write of mine. Some wording did not sit right with me either but I think it is almost there now. Thanks for the visit. Love, Mona xoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I love this Mona sounds just

I love this Mona sounds just like me. As you know I've just come of of hiding. All I need now is to refrain from letting the blues get to me. Great write and good advice on top. Rosina xena465
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Knit picking again I am dear Mona.

Ann of Norway "Come out of the hiding" ........the hiding? just hiding will do? "Vanished feelings of worn and blue".......feeling of blue/feelings of worn is odd to me. "From a withering soul There’s a story to be told"............Maybe 'your withering soul', found this odd too. ''Scuse I Ann with love to you, you Floridian smile.
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

It is okay

blue meaning blue and worn out meaning plain worn out of feeling blue and the withering soul is when someone has been under the dark clouds and walking a dreary soul inside. I will exbound on that in another poem perhaps. Have you never heard of a withering soul, when someone has no life left inside of them for so many different reasons? I shall revisit this again and you know I always love your comments yeay or nay. Love you xoxoxoxo Mona ps and no you are not picking I like your picking and reading very much!! Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you my lovely

Someday I will share another poem of another story. The dark gloominess alot of us may carry for alot of different reasons, some more then others, this poem was just reflecting how it is and how it may be time to overcome it. Everyone has sad days for sure, many many times and many many people, it could of been for many many years also that we walked in darkness. I will just say this is how I was once a very long time ago also, so when my soul awakened I was like the little girl again enjoying life and remembering the carousel instead of the pains and hurts of the youth..sometimes may carry into the teen and adult teen years. That is all I will say for now as I know alot of us can relate to things that have happened to us in life and how we have overcome most of it. It is work and IT CAN BE DONE:) :) Trust me I know I did just that. Light to all and love too! Thank you me Lovely Friend Annie Mona xoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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Thabo Maluleka

16 years 2 months ago

Great writing style!!!

Hello Magic I admire you writing style? I enjoyed reading your poem. I like the style and the arrangement. One thing about is that since I was young I enjoyed and still do, reading other peoples work. I find your poem to be conversational. It's full of advice. Great poetry style. Keep it up. Regards Thabo
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Why thank you so much

I appreciate that one very much, see even I need the encouragement and inspiration of one like you. LOL We all do from time to time. It is nice to read this from you. I like to wrote this way and know I can improve in many areas with other kinds of writing also, but you hit it on a nail, this is my style here. Thank you and I look forward to visit you also. Love Ya, Mona xxoox Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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Thabo Maluleka

16 years 2 months ago

That would be good. I would

That would be good. I would like to ask you to one day write a poem about the beauty of the places there in the United States. I visited New York (Manhattan) on business in November/December 2004). I thought that the place was such a beauty!! I have written a poem about my province here in South Africa (Limpopo Province) and it forms part of my 2nd anthology to be published later in the year. Whoever reads the poem can start imagining and picturing the beauty that is the Limpopo Province of South Africa. I am a keen traveller and I like to read about places. So I would love to read any poem (s) that you wrote about the beauty of your great country!! Like I said, if it's a poem I will read it. I read any poem by any writer. It's an addiction. Regards Thabo
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

I most certainly will

And thank you so much for the visit here again my Thabo. As you will see there is some of my story to this poem and it is for others who have gone through the same thing. It is nothing to be ashamed of at all as millions of people go through this everyday. I help alot fo people get back into the driver's seat of their lives and start taking control of what was taken from them. I will think of the poem and thank you for giving me a title also rather a theme to contemplate about, I like that, its a very good idea. Love You My Thabo xoxoxo Ms Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
chumfin

chumfin

16 years 2 months ago

i wont hide hide

hey white queen, i have never thought of hiding, with this again , i don't think i will, you wrote a great poem. thanks for this piece. chumfin
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Chum friend

Yes we need to be ourselves, let it out, work it out, experiences of the past should not haunt us today, it is very healthy to heal the inner self of all feelings that control our very being, mentally and physically and come out stronger for doing so. Please see the comment to Cat and you will understand better, and I thank you also for your comment here and correct I do not hide anything ever as it does ones mind and body no good to do so. Got to get it out and nip it in the bud for it festers and ruins you like a withering weed. :) Love Mona xoxoxox We are what we are and that is what makes each one of us special in our own way. Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Yes your assumption is correct

The fire smoldering is the soul dying and the embers to light a newer soul renewed and gone from the desolation and despair. Yes I will rework that some more as I know something was not quite right yet. Thanks Indi and you know I love your critique very much. All of you anyone who reads it. Love Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Indi friend

I appreciate that feedback coming from you as I know you tell the good and the bad of it and I always love them both. Yes I will catch up with you soon friend Love, Mona xoox Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

Anonymity

''In the solitude of a forgotten love We reside oblivious of darkened silence.'' I hope anonymity Is not hiding Have empathy, Not pity for me. Ur poems are lovely, Let all read, For a comma changed, Is a change in deed? And in a sense a newer creativity. I like u, When u stick to Ur guns, We all enjoy and have A bit of fun Anyway well-done LOVED BY ALL
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Loved

For stopping by and commenting here and the lovely poem you wrote. I thank you for the read and appreciate the time you spent here. Love, Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Mona

I have to agree with Dale's comment. This piece made me think of someone I know, it is if it was written for her. Always, Cat
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Golden

Actually this poem was written with myself in mind, and alot of others who are and have experienced the burdened soul of depression and anxiety. I probably could write alot more on this subject. There was a time in my own life I walked a very dark road and now have rekindled the spirit and soul like a new woman. This happened to me last year and maybe as I changed my job where there was so much ugly and despair I found the me that was there all along but stuck in a blackbox I describe the feeling of darkeness for a very long time. Then one day I started to remember alot of things that were buried in that black box, and once I worked through it and rid it of me, I started to change, my inner child, my sense of life and all around me just brought me into a much better light. My soul did not hurt as much and it was like a garbage truck lifted out of me..hard to explain just now those feelings I freed myself from. The recognition of the darkness and blowing it to the winds was the best thing I ever did for myself. No counselor no pill did what I did for myself and that was to work through it, starting writing and emptied out. I still have more work to be done but it is much better, the pain is not as surreal as it was all those years, walking down a dark road.. It is hard to explain here but I will find the time and courage to write of it someday soon. No more buried boxes of blackness I hold inside now for to work through it and to forgive the people who have wronged you is the best medicine anyone can recieve. It all takes courage and the will to let go and go on, afterall it's our attitude that can make or break us in anyway. Life may be unpleasant at times but I say ..this too shall pass, and it does. Sorry I guess I went into more discussion on this poem then I allowed myself to do but this may help others that anything is possible. Reckon alot of us have been through similiar things in life. Thanks for the visit and the star studded comments to all who read it. I appreciate it This poem is for all Love Mona xoxoxo
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Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

...

This is a wonderful poem Mona... ~Rain~ There's always a rainbow after the rain...
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Rain

Did you relate to any of it? What did you like about it and how have you been lately. I havent seen skye on here much and is she okay friend? Miss talking to you Love Mona xoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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Silent_Rain

16 years 2 months ago

yes...

I did retale to it... alot... I've been ok I guess, idk about Skye, I havent talked to her, I was also wondering why she hasnt been on... I'll talk to you soon, ~Rain~ There's always a rainbow after the rain...