Alembic

Vessel as wombIn purist formTangle thread of pulsing cord WombA safe place within for life TombA safe place for rest in death LoomThe weaving of all life warp and weft Life’s thread is warped nowThe shuttle is slowing on each passAs taut thread has paused the flowTaught thoughts terrorisingThe weakened pulseSpeeding the need to understandDesiring to be understoodAnd yetLove as it is being adequatePassion lost to ageI fear oldI fear old aloneMisunderstoodAm I as vessel empty enough?

— seabhac, Apr 05, 2010

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xena465

16 years 2 months ago

A great write Seabhac. Very

A great write Seabhac. Very deep in feeling and flowed through my mind so easily. I feel like this sometimes, but then it passes and I try to be positive...with a little help from my Neo friends...a friend like you. Rosina xena465

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

I guess you missed a level here

Distillation has everything to do with this poem, the separation of impurities... Is that not the point of why we try to reach the light? Alembic is two retorts connection by what ??? a tube, a cord without this the devise does not function, thus the thread of pulsing cord...womb connected, the red thread that leads us through the maze of life??? The word warped yes certainly was used for its double meaning here but to weave you certainly do not need wood...even a deck of cards can weave the most wondrous of patterns. Your immediate thought was warped wood but that is an image derived from your mind in the reading of the poem not from mine in its creation. I challenged my own creativity in the layout of this and I think it has the potential to work well...if anything I feel the end is a little whiney but unless we are empty then we cannot be filled being the ultimate point to the last line...Am I empty enough? I thank you for your questioning, I have missed it and it brings forward the subconscious in my write to the conscious awareness, a challenge not always met in feedback on Neo. Think about how this relates together with title and content with this new knowledge and I welcome feedback after further thought. Seabhac

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

I am afraid I have to disagree with Theo ... I wouldnt change much at all the warp and woof isnt only in wood its in fabric thread time ;) I loved this write ... applause take a bow in my humble opinion it is one of your best but I still love your giants ;) love and hugs JayCee x x

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Sweet Jayne

On white steed galloping ... I love the challenge of a good comment, for all the reasons I have put to Kal above. I like your visual of warp and weft being the thread of time, feedback on a poem is great when people choose to write a comment but I do love it when that comment has real depth of thought. I will write your story some day with bears and wolves in caves and for you there will be great giants amongst them. Seabhac