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Too Much Broken

A labyrinth of laborious breaths
Following a confusing spiraling line
That evades sound and sure footsteps.

These walls of solitude are slippery, 
              With no handholds,

A mind trap.........

Filled with suffering
That seeps into the fissures of subconcious.

And questions are cast

From a soul weighed down with the leaden weight
             of unstable knowledge,

Causing hope to sink its face
                Into the darkness of an abyss
                                          that bears my name.

— Blue_Halcyon, Apr 04, 2010

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Region, Country: Florida, USA

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Rumi, Kahlil Gibran, Edgar Allen Poe, Lewis Carrol, Yeats, Bukowski, Langston Hughes, Johanne Wolfgang von Goethe, ect.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Blue

Long time no see ... brilliant first poem back ... it reminded me of a book I read called Cubic ... dark and heavy and that end line is a killer welcome back kind regards love JayCee
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Too Much Broken...

Great to see you back! I haven't read " Cubic" but I will now! Dark, indeed. Hope that you and baby are well. I have missed you and our late night chats. Hope to see a lot more of you. ~ Gee
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

16 years 2 months ago

YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW

YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW FRICKING AWESOME IT IS TO SEE YOUR POEMS AGAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Missed ya like crazy Athena!!!!!!!! Loved this one, it's like a breathtaking moment of thought, a self evaluation looking in a mirror in the dark...LOVE IT! Peace!