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professor
professor
Apr 04, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Lover's Promise

I’ll be your only fantasy,the centre point that is your soul,each thought, each idle fancy,the dream you've dreamed will make you whole. Be everywhere your mind can look,your spirit in my heart’s embrace,your joy will be my only book,each word a smile upon your face. You are the star that is my truthwhich never leaves the morning sky,the fountain that is all my youth,where I must drink, or surely die. 
— professor, Apr 04, 2010

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Region, Country: China/Sichuan/Chengdu, CHN

Favorite Poets: Yeats, Elliot, Auden, Keats, Shelley, Byron

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

Happy Easter, Prof to you

Happy Easter, Prof to you and yours. We're all reborn in love. Love, Anna "Your task is not to seek for love, but merely to seek and find all the barriers within yourself that you have built against it." ~ A Course In Miracles
professor

professor

16 years 2 months ago

Happy Easter to you too

Anna. Ah yes, that rebirth thing.....so wonderfully bright, warm and wet, just like spring lol. Love Keith
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Imagine my great surprise to

Imagine my great surprise to find you here lol heya Big Brother ... loved your poem last line in the first verse I keep wanting to say ... a living dream that/will make/made you whole happy Easter to you and Lacy and the kids big smiles much love Lil Sis x x x
professor

professor

16 years 2 months ago

Happy Easter to you and yours too Lil Sis

I like to give the occasional surprise lol. The last line you suggest would fit well although it is not quite what my version is saying. The dream, dreamed by the loved one is the one she herself has always had about the kind of relationship that would truly allow her to become whole again. The Lover is not a living personification of the dream so much as a perfect match for its content. Love and hugs from your BB.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

16 years 2 months ago

A Lover's promise

I liked this one. Just one suggestion, and it could be me, but I would leave out Be (5th line) Beautiful! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
professor

professor

16 years ago

Hi Janice

Sorry to be so long in replying but its been a busy time. Thanks so much for your appreciation. As for the "Be" I prefer to keep it since it both adds emphasis at the beginning of the line and also makes the line the regulation 8 syllables which is important for this poem's rhythm. All the best Keith
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

15 years 12 months ago

A Lover's Promise

Keith This is so true you took the words our of my heart and soul this is my ever day my love my life my eternity beautiful Electric blue
professor

professor

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Maggie

Glad this strikes an immediate chord with you and hope that life and love are treating you well. All the best Keith
SH

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

well i hope you keep it always!

beautiful promise of love,your poem is very Romantic and i hope you are a true gentleman of your words! this poetry is just lovely! shirley harrison
loved

loved

15 years 10 months ago

you are that fountain of love

beneath which many a loving pair shall vow and love to u shall say wow wow wow and upon thy lips would love their name in poetic lure you can lure the same love love love as the pair would wont to share with you theirs
professor

professor

15 years 10 months ago

Thanks so much Loved

Would that I were the fountain itself, but I can surely drink my fill of her waters. Keith