Afraid of love

Read some of your posts and you have a wealth of "material" to work on here. I like this poem because it is of a universal theme, one we all have to grapple with and come to terms with, come to know. What is really important I think is what you haven't said, that is, the answer to the questions you ask in the third stanza. For me that is the key. cheers Craig.

don't go in an answer them like it's a fill in the blank test, no no no! Develop the poem, add on to it or rework it and while you that, think about those questions and by the end the poem you should reach a point where you have at least began to figure out the answers. Or maybe you'll figure out why it's important to love. Just so long as, by the end, some kind of realization (an epiphany of some kind) is reached. Stanza 1: no where--> nowhere "My heart slamming around inside"--> this sounds really cool! Stanza 2: i--> I brightens--> brings light to (sounds cooler) whole--> delete Stanza 3: "Can you beat it in a race"--> Can you outrun it "It turns to a pile of dust"--> It turns to dust Stanza 6: OMG! bad word! haha JK, it's totally okay to use profanity in poetry Stanza 7: 'to' on line 4-->too Stanza 8: last line--> since you just said that being with him makes it less scary I would delete that last line Also, I just noticed that all your poems follow a pretty strict four lines per stanza form. If that's how you want all your poems to be formed, that's cool, but they don't have to be! Look at some of mine, I've got stanzas that are only one line and lines that are only one word (although I'm not sure if I currently have any examples of that up...umm...hmm...just take my word for it, okay?)! Mix it up if you want! It can add a whole new level of variety, visual interest and power to your poetry! Kelsey PS: I think kissing and making up will be in order tomorrow. ;) You can't be mad on Easter! I won't let you!

i like this work very much,the last line gave me much relief. it was a great poem from you.good work. chumfin

this is a really great poem, keep writing, i enjoy reading them!