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Go to hell
The darkness is choking
every effort draining my soul
I try to scream for help
but no one is left to hear
I fail to struggle to my feet
sucked back down
in a liquid quicksand
of negativity compounded
by sticky innuendo
distrust and rumors
boiling the mix
to a hellish temperature
Victims lay bloody
at the edges of my
narrowed vision
fading in and out
they are covered in thick tar
oozing guilt and shame
their putrid essence
filling the noxious air
suffocating my labored lungs
death on what was left of their faces
as if a corrupt, corrosive venom
was eating at their flesh like acid
I can feel it eating me
burning from within
not flames of salvation
begging for a sterile end…
such are fires of damnation
we can only beg for a calming rain
a peace before it is doomed to be
repeated in our own hell
Julie
D.D.
4-3-2010
Critiques
Nordic cloud
16 years 2 months ago
Wow what a dream Julie O!
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
Thankfully not a dream Ann,
pamela
16 years 2 months ago
powerful
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
Thanks pamela, I was going
Draki
16 years 2 months ago
Wonderfully dark write, like
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
So glad you could like it
Seren
16 years 2 months ago
Dear Julie
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
So glad it was out of my
Beauregard
16 years 2 months ago
Julie!
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
You are so right my Dark
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
How does it read now? Julie
Beauregard
16 years 2 months ago
much better!
weirdelf
16 years 2 months ago
This was my life until 6 months ago
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
Who said your not still an
weirdelf
16 years 2 months ago
teeheehee well, I got a rep to uphold, eh?
Beauregard
16 years 2 months ago
I'm
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
Perfectly!
xena465
16 years 2 months ago
It’s good to write about
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
More damned then angry but
Rett
16 years 2 months ago
I'm late but...
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
WHAT, it was hell. Was I
anonymous1
16 years 2 months ago
Liked so many lines.
DawningDaytripper
16 years 2 months ago
Thanks Lisa, your read and