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seabhac
seabhac
Apr 02, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The concrete of my mind

  I’ve spent my dayPressure washing greyFrom the concreteOf my mindThe grey beneathBrighter, lighterWashed of winters wasteSunlight prismedOn hosed pathI am imprisonedIn a gardenOf my own growthOf stagnant cabbage boredomI am alive outsideBut withinThe naked sun has not yet reachedThe clenched teeth of my pussyWhich holds tightThe memory of your last delight.This is springInterspersed with snippets of sunI await the glow of summer onMy autumnal body  
— seabhac, Apr 02, 2010

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seabhac

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Hi

Very recent discovery that it's got teeth...all this time and i just didn't know! Seabhac
Esker

Esker

16 years 2 months ago

am awake now!

I love this feeling this finding of new words of creative verve I like your writing style very much Esker~
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Wow

Great play on words and put a smile on my face. I will have to send someone, maybe a dentist, lol, you poor girl. A beauty, I must say, sad in a way but boy you turned that around. Lol. Loved the creativity of this one hun. Brush three times a day okay, thats what they say, lol. I do feel for you. Love and smiles, Lyz. XX
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Lyz

A dentist sounds ideal, got to keep an eye on oral hygene...as long as he is dumb to the words of poetry, in fact he doesn't need to speak at all!Ha ha Seabhac
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Hello you two

Glad to see you come up for air occasionally The needs of poets, too big a topic here but I had Ann’s words ringing in my ears and could empathise where she had been when she wished to shave her head and become a nun. Funny how words can ride with you on the journey and make themselves heard when appropriate. You two make it possible to believe that poets can love. Thanks for that positive affirmation Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

apparently they do have teeth and do all sorts of tricks so my boys tell me ... lmao this is a brilliant write you better go read Annas new poem ... pussy is the topic of the day lmao loved it and the boredom lifts ;) love JayCee
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ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

hi interesting indeed some great play on words and some good originality ,,,,,,zigs
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Ziggy

Did a great job of the patio slabs too!! Give me a mundane task and I'll right it by writing it. Seabhac
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

pussy

when i spoke of pussy they all pushed me so i quietly give 5 stars away loved