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DawningDaytripper
DawningDaytripper
Apr 01, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

After the dream,

She came to as she was falling

right before the hard landing

a traumatic night of

awkward dreams

soon to fade in the light of day

what was she doing

with who

why?
 

Just a dream she tells herself

not understanding the context

so she looses the meaning

faces and names on tip of her tongue

but why do they haunt her

how can she interpret

what she was destined to forget
 

The doors to her dreams change

as does the place and players

always with a fragmented goal

surrounded by the confusion of purpose

looking for direction

in a world pre-confined
 

Filled with shadows and stranger’s

hoping to wake up in time…

For what?
 

As time tells there is a theme

a small hope for after the dream

 

Julie

D.D.

3/31/2010

— DawningDaytripper, Apr 01, 2010

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Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Awkward dreams, yes you caught the atmosphere

Ann of Norway Just right Julie, I was filled with fascination and agreement, at the complexity of the puzzles dreams set for us to understand. Oh such a lovely quandary, such a description of the dream world and its unfathomable happenings that take command of ones sight, sounds, smell and touch, until we do not know whether it is real, based on reality, or a hidden parable for reality, and yet when its there its real enough. I liked the way you led me through this poem Julie. Love as aye from Ann.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

What I love most about every

What I love most about every comment you make Ann, you make it obvious you read every line and nuiance. And go out of your way to see it how I tried to write it. So many expect thier to be a box and we are with in it, were you lift the box and we dance together. I love you. Just incase I haven't told you lately. Somedays I think of you just to draw a more peaceful and appreaciative breath. You are more inspiring than you will ever know. And then add excellent form and natural talent, well your just a blessing. Julie D.D.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Oh my- but then I don't beleive in him!

Ann of Norway But I HAD TO COME STRAIGHT HERE with such compliments flying onto the page from such a lovely smiling face and good heart, and say THANK YOU Julie. Oh how happy you make me feel, that I do what you say and adequately, and even inspire, it is a joy to hear you say it; and the fact that I can calm your thoughts when its not to do with poetry is overwhelmingly wonderful to hear. Yes I think I have an inner calm, from where, perhaps as 'they' say a former life, where I matured and now can have the good luck to be able to tap that hidden calm, as when all is chaos that comes to help me in my mind and give me solace. I have a long way to go on some fields though!!!!! Not to mention them. If I have the capacity to bless then blessed you shall be as far as my powers can tell that it is so. blessings to all Neopoets, and love from my heart to all you positive birds flying in the sky-blue of my computer each day thank you for being such a lovely flock. Ann.
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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

a glimpse

Dear D., Loved it. A glimpse into a different world settled firmly in the subconscious. Beautifully done. P.
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

VERY FIVE STAR WORTY POEM

We poets Each one of us is unique I have no ability to comment, Nor correct, As any comma and full stop change, Will the poet’s originality derange? But five stars we must give So the poet is ready For his next kill. Gr8888888888 poetry Lovely Spot light worthy LOVED
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

That is the exact same

That is the exact same comment you just put on Moonmans no buffer zone. This is a workshop. I like stars and spotlight. But I LOVE it when someone reads. And takes the time to give me a personal comment. Even a suggestion. I will revolt against anyone who thinks posting cooky cutter comments and skimming a poem is why we are here. Even if you liked it. As for grammer and spelling, or at least the attempt of it. It is important. Julie D.D.
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

DD this is a nice one

I liked the flow of it and it sounds great. I hope you had a nice weekend Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Mona, I hope your

Thanks Mona, I hope your weekend and Easter was brilliant. Rosina's return sure made it memorable. Thanks for all of your help. Julie D.D.