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Seren
Seren
Mar 31, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

a shallow breath

I am fret-less,
in a fingers slide
palming the sublime

a lost cord
the first guide
on my journey
I was yanked 
into destiny's
embrace

alien phantastic
orphaned to never
and bound
on the loom
of fate

I kiss sleep from
your mouth
and bathe
in dreams
of you  

I am incandescent
on a loop of twine  

— Seren, Mar 31, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne

my favorite lines: I kiss sleep from your mouth and bathe in dreams of you my only complaint is with the title. It seems to me a bit redundant, but I have no suggestions for an alternate title. I really liked this piece and would like to see it have a complimentary title. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

so glad you liked this one, and your exactly right I couldnt think of a better title so i was planning to do it today lol hugs thanks for the advice I think this ones better but still not a hundred percent happy with it lol love Jayne-Chloe x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne

It is a better title, but if you're not satisfied with it, I'm sure you will come up with something better. It is in your nature and within your range of possibilities. Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

Going to have to think on it ... this ones got me stumped lol doesnt happen usually but it still happens, thanks for the vote of confidence love and hugs JayCee x x x
L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne

Romantical in a way, lol. I am also feeling happiness. Well you always tantalize the taste buds with your words hun and this is no exception. I adored it. Lyz.xx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Lyz

Happiness hmmmm yes you have sort of got it nearly lol ;) and if I tantailsed you with this lol wait till you read my next lol hahaha havent written a steamer for a while ;) love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Dirty Girl

I cant wait. Maybe it is here now but I have not gotten to anyones new posts yet. Happy Easter to you and all, by the way. I may be off the site soon, depending on appointment times. I will fill u in soon. Love this poem and if u r gonna tantalize, should I read it in the wee hours of darkness. Lol. Love all. Lyz. XX
CS

club special

16 years 2 months ago

I read this poem not knowing

I read this poem not knowing it was you Seren, and though, gee, who the f*** is this? Wowed again ,Club Special,,, Keep up the good work!!
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Brian

well hold on to your hats mate cause my next writes going to upset some and excite others lol love JayCee x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Draki

So glad you liked this one smile thanks for the comment love Jayne-Chloe x x
R

R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 2 months ago

I kiss sleep from your

I kiss sleep from your mouth and bathe in dreams of you these lines rerberate. shan
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Shan

if it reverberated I am very pleased smiles Love Jayne-Chloe
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

Oh WOW Jayne

Ann of Norway You loop us into the wheels of fate with such panache and such imagery, we are helpless and find ourselves in harmony with you, we love to ride your poems through the labyrinths of the imagination, and feel as we do while passing, the thoughts that never let us become unaware of where we are. Just wonderful. I hear your voice singing in my mind and feel the incandescent brightness flashing its white refrain. Jayne, we love to read your mind and be mesmerised into dreams with it. Love from Ann to dear you.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ann

Biggest smiles I have been very busy with the kids and family this week its so good to have you back I should be round a bit tomorrow fingers crossed lol email me and tell me of your travels and what you saw ~! cant wait to hear I am looking forward to hearing about it bloody good to have you back huni ((((hugs)))) lovve Jayne-Chloe x x x x P.S I missed you