seabhac

Mar 30, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

In the language of Love

In the flower of our friendshipThe language flowedWith petals of poppy vibrancyBright and alive on spindly stemmed legsWe danced in the meadows of windswept grassNo burger vans near earthed moundsOr Ice-cream sellers jarring the stillnessWith off tune soundsJust the pure raw beauty of wordsWhich trickled and tickled my mind and bodyI fell in love with your words and yourMouth that spoke themTo end it you servedA one line clichéThe perfect juxtapositionA crucifixion for my passionA scythe for the field of poppies.

— seabhac, Mar 30, 2010

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Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

I fucking love your use of poppies in this one from the first mention I was thinking opium induced chatter and then your scythe ... just another brilliant write ... I have line envy lol mark of fine poems ... nominated love Jayne-Chloe

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

wow

I love it when you talk dirty...ha ha Making a poppy outfit at the moment for a very ill lady who wishes to be buried in it but its connections and associations run as deepfor me as the blood red colour its wildness nods from fallow fields. I'm healing, word by word, poem by poem. Thanks Seabhac

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Bleeding the badness out is

Bleeding the badness out is cathartic for all of us (hugs) love JayCee x x x

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Beautiful

Cruel ending but well written. Worded beautifully, a poem felt. Lyz. XX

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Lyz

Thanks for popping by for a visit and taking the time to comment Seabhac

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

I hope all is well now. A wonderful write all the same, love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Seabhac

These are my favorite lines: In the flower of our friendship The language flowed With petals of poppy vibrancy Bright and alive on spindly stemmed legs We danced in the meadows of windswept grass The ending, a shock to my senses, was well received. Always, Cat

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Thank you Cat

As with all experiences in life we need to remember that which was good about it even if the ending is as you so aptly put it "a shock to the senses" Thanks Seabhac

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

hi , great to see you in spot and deserved to with you words in this another fine write one of your best of late as i see it all the good lines mentioned above cheers good stuf ,,,,,,,ziggy

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

gets my nom to well done to you ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Thanks Ziggy

Affirmative words and support What this site does best Personalises people and life experiences. Very Best Wishes Seabhac

Bernard Shaw

16 years 2 months ago

seabhac

Seabhac Just the pure raw beauty of words Which trickled and tickled my mind and body I fell in love with your words. This caught my eye and I felt compelled to give your poem top marks Bern

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Hello Bern

So many good poems on Neo,I am delighted that you took the time to read and comment. Thanks Bern Seabhac

odd molly

16 years 2 months ago

In the early summer we have

In the early summer we have fields and fields of red poppies here and the colour is as you say vibrant and nothing could be more beutiuful and those thin ethereal petals which are so much like watered silk. I so love this poem and your style of writing.It is what I would like to call excellent and amazing- love. o molly

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Hello Molly

Compliment indeed. Thank you, watered silk now that is a lovely phrase and raises great images to me. I hope to visit those fields some day. Seabhac

Cloudthings

16 years 2 months ago

rare visit here to find this tantalizing, filigree laced work fr

What a delightful surprise to pop in for a rare visit here & find this tantalizing, filigree laced work from you. From the the fist moment, I wondered if the poppy dancing referred to the tall rare ones such as you are, & you made no crude reference, remaining true to the delicacy & subtlety throughout. A deep & satisfying write, the sad twist, a clincher. Thank you, it's a gift. Cheers xx Anni~ "Three passions have governed my life: The longings for love, the search for knowledge, And unbearable pity for the suffering of [humankind]." Bertrand Russell

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

I have missed you Anni

I am not tall or rare but short and ordinary but I am glad my words made me appear otherwise.The power of words staggering , the damage of silence even more so. Thanks Hugs Seabhac

Cloudthings

16 years 2 months ago

Dear sea, poppiness is in

Dear sea, poppiness is in the eye of the beholder. I see you as unique and talented, with a beautiful understated nobilty. The poem leads me there again. And how deeply I empathize with the content. Did we fall for the same man? May you heal & grow with velocity & grace. Xx Cheers Anni~ "Three passions have governed my life: The longings for love, the search for knowledge, And unbearable pity for the suffering of [humankind]." Bertrand Russell

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Liz

Many congrates for the spotlight .. smiles love Jayne-Chloe

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Smiles to you Jayne

You made it possible! Hugs Seabhac

loved

16 years 2 months ago

LOVELY ALL FIVERS GARLAND OF LOVE

As some one above has already said it It’s a really good fucking worthy POPULAR poem Regards In the solitude of a forgotten love We reside oblivious of darkened silence. Loved

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago