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Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Mar 29, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Kill

The Kill
by: Eddy Styx

Amazon woman

You exhaust me

With your

metamorphic words

Of quick. hot. razor. sharp.

alterations

Of limestone and

scathing dolomite

Sarcastic sedimentation

Is the basis for your

lovely coloration

Simple chemical impurities

work their wonder

For years

this marble rock formation

That has accumulated and

formulated around me

For several decades

of trecherous time

Someday your mallet

and chisel tongue

Will let fly all

your artistry and rage

Upon this living

breathing

Crystalized being

I have come to be

...Sculpted...

And left

in your weedy garden

For rag-tag pigeons

to perch and poop upon

— Candlewitch, Mar 29, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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poewriter58

16 years 2 months ago

Cat

Why Amazon women? will revisit this poem. I have to digest it first Chrys
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Chrys

To answer your question, why Amazon woman? Because she is all this and more: Am·a·zon or a·ma·zon (plural a·ma·zons) strong woman: a notably tall, physically strong, or strong-willed woman Encarta® World English Dictionary © she is also cruel and unyielding. Hope my explanation helped. Always, Eddy/Cat
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ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

eddy

hi being a stone mason , i really love your metaphors and the theme here , great to see you letting eddy out to neo again cheers cat its good good ,,,,,zigs
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Ziggy

So you are a stone mason, how intriguing. It must be wonderful to work in that medium! Thanks for your support. Always Eddy/Cat
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Ooh Yeah

Marvelous, boy u r good. I could listen to Eddie all day, lol, so long as it was not aimed at me. And the spell check lady is here, yep, lol. And chisel tongue. Chisel, just wrong way round. Love it. Lol. I enjoyed this one of Eddies immensely and I am glad to have stopped in this morn. Be good, Love to all. XX
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hello Dear Lyz

Thank you for catching my spelling error, I greatly appreciate it. I'm so glad to have you as a reader. Love, Eddy/Cat
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lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

You made me laugh, when do I ever get a chance to be a critic on your wonderful work, lol. Glad I did something right. Lol. Love to all. XX
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pamela

16 years 2 months ago

lovely

Dear C., I loved the feel of this piece and the way it flowed. A poem for the forgotten? P.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hello P.

It is a poem from my male alter ego Eddy Styx. Yes, you could say it is a poem for the forgotten. Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate the lovely stars. Always, Eddy/Cat
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Draki

16 years 2 months ago

He’s a victim of Medusa,

He's a victim of Medusa, turned to stone! That's what I'm put in mind of on one level, or perhaps the dark female and stone references are described as one in this, therefore the dark female and victim are one and the same, she looks in the mirror, and thus herself is stone! The female antagonist is described in less than human terms, but not so much animal, as mineral, hence even more remote from emotion and with less capacity for reasoning than an animal, so dangerous, possessed of a cold and ancient intelligence, hard, unyielding, a primal force. "and chisel tongue Will let fly all" I like that, powerful! I wonder, is there at all in this, the voice of any lost poems? It's like the voice of a lost or abandoned poem, about it's poet. Just my thoughts, ~Draki.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hello Draki

Yes, you are right, he is turned to stone by her cold uncaring attitude. I'm not sure what you mean by "the voice of any lost poems" It was written by my male alter ego: Eddy Styx. Thank you very much for the in depth review. I appreciate it greatly. Always, Eddy/Cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hello

Thank you for reading and commenting, Dale. Always, Eddy/Cat
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

nice to meet you eddy

i've had to read this several times and i'll have to read it several more before i digest it properly i especially love the last lines 'And left in your weedy garden For rag-tag pigeons to perch and poop upon' brilliant write give my love to cat xxx judy
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Hi Judy

Thanks for reading my poem. I wasn't sure about that line, but you make me glad I left it in. Love, Eddy/Cat