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Mar 29, 2010
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Memory Of Grace
At dawn
still water mirroring
emerald silence
of forested hills
marching up to mountains
on all sides
we set out across the loch
when tide was high and blue
with cloudless sky
oars trailing coiling whirlpools
the hiss of water underneath
and creak of rollocks on still air
while beneath our boat
the ocean filled with pulsing jellyfish
delicate
clear mantled ringed with purple
bright against the dark of depth
Somewhere in that
soundless space
between one shore and the other
mackrel boiled without warning
up onto the surface
to fill the air with sudden
hungry scream
of diving gulls and terns
that made you laugh with joy
as we threw our feathered hooks
across the gunnels
and hauled in a dozen flapping fish
in as many frenzied seconds
Far across that stretch
of empty water
we set our feet upon
a curve of golden sand
we knew had not felt
footsteps
for longer than a century
and there we ate our meal
of roasted mackrel
steamed mussels,
kelp and cockels
taken from the rocks and beach
on either side
Afterwards we swam
safe in nakedness
and sunlit
blue-green sea,
the seals watching
sleek and saucer-eyed,
curious as cats
before we stretched out
on the warm sand
where you fell into
contented slumber in my arms,
and I spent the lengthening shadows
of that highland afternoon
watching your sweet face
and the rise and fall
of your breasts
wondering
as I touched your sun-brown skin
how I ever
came to share the grace
that was your life
still water mirroring
emerald silence
of forested hills
marching up to mountains
on all sides
we set out across the loch
when tide was high and blue
with cloudless sky
oars trailing coiling whirlpools
the hiss of water underneath
and creak of rollocks on still air
while beneath our boat
the ocean filled with pulsing jellyfish
delicate
clear mantled ringed with purple
bright against the dark of depth
Somewhere in that
soundless space
between one shore and the other
mackrel boiled without warning
up onto the surface
to fill the air with sudden
hungry scream
of diving gulls and terns
that made you laugh with joy
as we threw our feathered hooks
across the gunnels
and hauled in a dozen flapping fish
in as many frenzied seconds
Far across that stretch
of empty water
we set our feet upon
a curve of golden sand
we knew had not felt
footsteps
for longer than a century
and there we ate our meal
of roasted mackrel
steamed mussels,
kelp and cockels
taken from the rocks and beach
on either side
Afterwards we swam
safe in nakedness
and sunlit
blue-green sea,
the seals watching
sleek and saucer-eyed,
curious as cats
before we stretched out
on the warm sand
where you fell into
contented slumber in my arms,
and I spent the lengthening shadows
of that highland afternoon
watching your sweet face
and the rise and fall
of your breasts
wondering
as I touched your sun-brown skin
how I ever
came to share the grace
that was your life
— Race_9togo, Mar 29, 2010
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Critiques
Seren
16 years 2 months ago
From your first four lines
Race_9togo
16 years 2 months ago
Thanks Jayne
lyz
16 years 2 months ago
Well
Race_9togo
16 years 2 months ago
Glad that you enjoyed it Lyz,
weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
You lost me at the beginning, I only persevered reading
Race_9togo
16 years 1 month ago
Hello Jess
weirdelf
16 years 1 month ago
All the revisions, including the title are, to me, significant
Race_9togo
16 years 1 month ago
Jess
Seren
16 years 1 month ago
Dear JIm
Race_9togo
16 years 1 month ago
Hi Jayne
Kailashana
16 years 1 month ago
I ache with the beauty of
Race_9togo
16 years 1 month ago
Hello Anna,