BREATHE IN MY ENGLAND

Saxon names of places
magical and blue,
the geographic
Lakeland scenes-
Hallen Fell, Skiddaw,
names ancient, pre-dating
calm.

Romantic Englands'
pretty jewel- in contrast
to other mountains
mileu.

Beacon Tarn and
moss-covered bridges
like wistful retreats, make
Lakeland's lofty
perspectives a
treat.

Breathe in my England,
the views to inspire.
Jaw-dropping tracts
meandering valleys
hewn
from vengeful Titans
to shape and tarry
hard places,
now benign.

Still lovely
my England,
still lovely
beyond
compare.

Ellie LaCrosse

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Comments

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ellie

A little Gem on the isle of britannia ... you ;)lol did you mean Breath or breathe ?? (Breath in my England) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

typo....

Breathe....breathe....breathe...!!!....lol

jetz

16 years 1 month ago

Hi, Great imagery in this.

Hi, Great imagery in this. It has a very nice flow too. I like the occasional rhyme, as well. Sue

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Thank you,

Hi J, I was reading a magazine about walking the most romantic walks in Britain...The Lake District came out tops time & time again...had some awesome autumnal photograohy of the region...MY jaw dropped at it's rich tapestry-like landscapes...when I lived overseas...those images always made me feel all warm & fuzzy about being a Brit! Ells x

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

the last two stanzas were what this poem should be

the rest is just description, personal and well written, but lacking passion. Cheers, Jess, As Salman Rushdie said, (and it is on the back of the Neopoet tshirts) “A poet’s work; to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world and stop it going to sleep”

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks, Jess

Further to our earlier discussion about my use of 'poetic' in the first stanza...I can see you're point of view and you've got me thinking about a genre I could work up...something I thought I wouldn't be interested in..myths & legends!...just stated in my recent blog that those 'fictional' themes didn't interest me..... ok...so i'm fickle! Ells x

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

[smiles] myths and legends often contain more poetic truth

except when reduced to dogma Cheers, Jess, As Salman Rushdie said, (and it is on the back of the Neopoet tshirts) “A poet’s work; to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world and stop it going to sleep”

kaligantsaros

16 years 1 month ago

Hewn by or from Titans..

A very good write Ellie , again pointing to your ability to capture and essence. Love the begining of the harking back to Saxon and Roman Angleland. Good stuff. I really like this though think about losing that first "too" which adds that most awful ..toot to the end of that stanza. And is mileu a word to use here ..another to lose. IMHO of course as seems the preferred suggestion.

panaella

16 years 1 month ago

Ok..I'll re-work it..Uber-critiquer

Theo Mileu...alliterates with mountain...and the previous word jewel...and Lakeland is richly textured not staggeringly majestic like mountains in Europe or Scotland etc...it's staying put. But thanks for taking the time to peruse...I've removed 'too'...you were right...I'm flattered...I know you wouldn't bother if you thought it was shite. Ells x