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Dixie Rose shattered, salt dropped and shattered again

                       s     s  s          reese creek road            f  a f   f                 
                     t       t   u         soldiers there knew it      a     a     f        
                   r    t    t  e           well like i the bendy            u  l    a  
                          e  r            banditty Texas twists       a    l    l   t    
                    t         r  r         yellow lines no shoulder        t    t    l     

              a     s     h   s         twenty-eight feet on the      e     h     h 
              o     o  h     o           pavement pointing with       h     e    e        a       
                    c      c     s        burnt accuracy to a broken       a     r     a     
                  k       k                 toothed solemn grin of a         t     r      t        t 

                        r     e  r   r   e          wood post cattle wire           r      r    u    r   
                b     e  r    m   m   e           fence gashed grass in          u   r     u   n    u   
                m   e    b     r     e          the gap found your glasses     n    i   u    n n  
                      e  b e       e r        in a poc bent and lame            u   r     n   g   i
                      e    e   r    r    m         empty i put them in my          n     g     g  

                                           d     d         pocket to give you later      d   d    r d     r 
                                         d             u           habits, huh?                        d   r      r         r  
                                       d m        u               can't remember what i            uu   r    u   n    u    
                                           m       b     m      did  with them now                 u     n     k     n 
                                           b      b               but still see them staring                  k       k  n   k

                                                        a    b    b       b           up at me wi
                                                           a    a   b     a           and pebble     th sand eyes     g        g   g  u       
                                                          b   b    l                 looking los     pupils                    g u      u     i     g    
                                                            b     l     b l           and impu        t and useless            l      u          l
                                                              e  l    e              much to         dent                       u           l 
                                                           l   e    b   e    e         them a          o late                    t     l         u
                                                                                                              nd I                       t         t


       a a l     a                I was showing dad            s     i    s    s        
      l    l a  m   l          how to download his              i    m   i    s    i  p
       m os  o m s  m      doo-wops and obscurities       p   p m    p  m         i   
         o  s t s   o t         he hadn't heard in thirty      p     l     e   l l      e           
       
    b  l   b     years- the last time i'd            a    s        s                  
     b  u   l    see that spark there-                  s      a  l        a   
  u     u       when a knock knock knock        t   l   a   t      l
e     e    u    made for a salty evening            t      t     l  

           f     f  l  f          family was the importance         f     f      f  l       l 
            l   o    f  l         to him friends couldn't                l    u   l   l   f u   f 
            o    a     o         call, mine at least                       tt    u  e    t      u      t
             t  a  t   o   t       some bridges make pathetic         r   e  r      r   e     t  

            g    g       kindling i got messages        b  u    b      b         
        g   e  o  o n       he got real busy              u  b  r   u    r        
     e    o  e n   n        no time!  none to dwell       n  r  n  r   n           
                                              
                                        t  t   e    tt        his despair of finding    n     n    o      n               
                                  r  t    e    e     t        no purchase at the         o    o   t   n              
                                        r   r              edge of a dark jagged         t   n     h t    i      t   
                                     r     o      r         canyons slippery lip           hi    g   i   h        i      
                                        o   o   r   r        he's better now                h    gn    n   g

                                             h   a  h     h      still floating a bit      e     t  t    e   t    
                                           h  a      a    a      without his rock i            e   a   t    e         
                                              h   r  d   a       sing song and cry         a     r  a   r     e
                                           d   r      d  r       for him but he does       r   s    s    a           

                                  y      e  y      not know this as                       h    mh  h   
                                  s   y  s   e      i'm sure he does for me           h      m m     

                      
           t    t   o   t            so many pieces               f     f  o     f        
           t  o   t d   o           lost of me like you         o   v    o   e   v r  f  r              
            a   d   d  o          shattered and scattered         e   f   r   e                  
               y   a                  like leaves and anyone          e e    v    e     v  e       
 
                         s     s    t s                 that knows they'll be          h    h   o h        
                             s   i   t   l              forgotten- but your plot       o   o  l    o  d   l        
                          l i      i   l    t            still plays out, mom              h   d  l  d    l d           
    
 
                              m              I promise   h    m
— the_fool, Mar 27, 2010

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Region, Country: Austin, TX, USA

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the_fool

the_fool

16 years 2 months ago

flutters

the scattered flutters around the verses are from left to right, top to bottom- stutter - fault shock - heart remember - running dumb - drunk almost - simple blue - salt float - flutter gone - burn terror - nothing hard - tears yes - hmmm today - forever still - hold mm - hmm ps- this is about the night my mother died flipping a miada thru a ditch and fence. took three hours to post this just right
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 2 months ago

hi

I liked the poem it's really heart felt and deeply emotional and therefore moving, i don't think you need the 'flutters' around it, they're impossible to decipher (speaking for myself) I'd love to see you post this again without them r let the poem stand on its own , its fine work and deserves more readers.