Sadness.

Sadness.

The setting of the sun is a very sad moment it brings too many memories. Memories left well alone to disperse as they may. The rising of the moon is totally different a soft effervescing light that can only half peer into the depths of that well left alone. My very being is feeling the outcomes of a soul in torment. The well-hidden shadows come to the fore like on a bright sunlit day. I hide as well as I am able the rising torments of a consciousness that leaves me reeling with the ill thought depths of my troubled soul.

Who shall have compassion with a wretched being that is only half the spirit it is meant to be. Who?

— Bernard Shaw, Mar 26, 2010

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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Oh Bern I do!!!

sometimes we may get sadness but always know that it too shall pass and know that I love you and many others, it is true about the moon also. Sometimes you have to feel these feelings as no one's life is perfect and we all experience the same thing as you. You wrote some beautiful books, your a great person, so now go kiss your hand and know Ms Mona sent you that all the way from Florida with much love and compassion and of course the spirit too!! You wrote of a troubled soul so write a blog on it and express how you feel in your writings, we all do it and maybe it will make you feel some release of it for the soul can stay darkened for a long time until we have to reach in there, work it out of darkness to bring the light back in. Love You Bern xoxooxxoxo Mona I forgot this one If your sad and feeling blue Always remember I love you.

Bernard Shaw

16 years 2 months ago

Mona.

Mona this is just an attempt to write a poem that does not rhyme.I am not the person to feel deep sadness.My whole life has been such that i always find something good in everything that happens. Love bern

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Great to hear my dear

Yes and I concer with what you have said, Keep up the good works friend xoxxooxo Mona Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

You’re a great writer and

You're a great writer and I like everything you write. It's comes straight from your heart. Rosina xena465

Bernard Shaw

16 years 2 months ago

Rosina.

Thank you Rosina, Please do not let the poem make you think that I am at all sad. It was just a poem or a try to write poetry without rhyme. I have a poem that I hope will be read when it is time for me to go. Do Not Grieve. Do not grieve when I pass away, Remember it is but another stop upon my way. On my way to a better existence. That has always beckoned me from a distance. It is a threshold that we all must cross, Know that my passing is not a loss. I will ascend to a temple of learning, That my soul has been forever yearning. Knowledge I will gain that man does not know, So do not grieve at this my funeral below. Be cheerful at my open grave this day, Send me off with good wishes that is all I pray.

magics02

16 years 2 months ago

A Tear for this one to Bern

Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I thought you were sad until

I thought you were sad until I read your comment back to Mona so I'm very happy that you're not sad. And I love your poem in your comment too. Thank you Bern my little friend. Rosina xena465

weirdelf

16 years 2 months ago

oh sir! You excell yourself!

A minor crit, lose the "who" at the end of the work, a single word question is always a weak ending. My other crit is purely personal, I adore sunsets! They lead to the respite of night, they are often wondrous in beauty and metaphorically form a part of the endless cycle of life and death. I honor you for extending yourself and this is a truly fine, emotive write. Cheers, Jess, “The political arena leaves one no alternative, one must either be a dunce or a rogue.” Emma Goldman

Bernard Shaw

16 years 2 months ago

Jess

Thank you Jess. The who is no problem and I have learnt something new. Like you I love the sunset, it is the time of the day when I relax and let my thoughts wander way out into space. Star Trek is a favourite sc-- fiction series that I enjoy. Bern