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lou
lou
Mar 26, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I Grit my Teeth

There's a thread stretched out

but it still has room to give

i grit my teeth and hang on

desperately tying knots

making repairs

i hear the tiny fibres strain

i hear them snap

another knot appears

it will stretch into infinity

before the last fibre breaks

— lou, Mar 26, 2010

About This Poem

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Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Critiques

Geezer

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Gritting Teeth...

I really like this one, Lou. I feel the tension, and the frustration. You have done well with this one. I personally don't like using a small I when writing, it makes me feel like the writer doesn't like themselves, or feel that what they have to say is important. You are important here. You along with everyone else, is what makes this site what it is. ~ Geezer.
lou

lou

16 years 2 months ago

Teeth ungritted

Thanks Geezer I'm really pleased you liked it xx-Lou