Just Believe Me

I once saw

A guy and gal

Actually making love

Inside the water

At waist deep depth

Twas really exhilarating,

What a scene once twas!

Gr8888…

Your poetry speaks out

Ones’ desire and mine

Where else

Except on a beach

Without inhibitions

Can one real love define?

It goes in and out

Then that’s all in the beachy fun

Of that there’s no doubt.

We all are near the beach now

The snows have melted somehow.

— loved, Mar 25, 2010

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Country/Region: ROU

Critiques

Bonitaj

16 years 2 months ago

Oh Loved!

Your metaphors strike me quite as being quite literal! Clever little write -especially the last two lines! Bonita j

loved

16 years 2 months ago

I didn't know what a metaphor was Till someone asked me to use one And I asked, What for? Now I know what poets say And other’s minds display. Some say use Some say disuse, So I use to disuse Sometimes they convey What they have to, At other times Even I don’t know what to do. So metaphor or not Help, Help, Help me I rarely know any good English My lap top alone Does actually help me. Loved by one and all non poet me

loved

16 years 2 months ago

thanks

i love ur honest and encouraging comments thanks once agin