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When I hear The Song

 

 





 

 

Sudden acridity stings,

consumes my vision.

 

Breath catches in

ragged inhalation.

 

At first

a sigh.

 

Melancholy.

 

Sinking into sorrow

deep and black.

Longing stirs,

craving manifests.

 

I smell the baby.

I see the smile of the child.

I hear the laughter of the man.

I touch a memory.

 

Then

I taste the fear,

 

for I know

what’s coming.

 

From my centre

a singularity

explodes

issuing wretched

ever-swelling

agony.

 

A physicality of something

in torment

seeding from where

Aphrodite resides.

 

Spasms of tribulation

rock in waves -

in waves of retro-labour.

 

violent

vivid

upward and outward.

 

Verso-laborious,

 

racking waves

undulate upwards

through and past my heart

seeking solace in caress.

 

At the base of my throat

my hands

soothe invisibility.

 

 

 

— judyanne, Mar 25, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

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Critiques

loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

just wonderful

The words and the thoughts behind your lovely poem swell ones eyes perhaps you know why and i needn't say so for the knowledge is not without thee but about ye.
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

This is great Judy. I like

This is great Judy. I like the way it flows and the deep meanings that I feel from it. Rosina xena465
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

nice to meet you

even nicer that you felt my poem of pain (funny thing to say isn't that?) love judy
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Judd

Your pain is palapable ... wonderful poem ... cannot say more I choked with you love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

dear jc

thank you mate, i tried to describe the palpableness of the emotion. it is a very real manifest, an entity in itself. love judd xxxx
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Judd

You not only tried but succeeded ... you speak of something we both share ... loss for mothers is universal I find it something I havent been able to write yet maybe you doing so will give me the courage to do so love Jayne-Chloe x x x
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

thanks jc

a needed confidence booster. funny how the universe works i wasn't going to submit anything last night - thought i'd give neopoets a break from my poem-a-day-continous but then The Song came on the radio and i was compelled to write my feelings it's amazing how no matter how often i hear this song the pain does not subside with familiarity funny too that i knew this particular song was for someone special to me before i ever even knew him love judd
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 2 months ago

hi there

powerful poem. i also liked your poem about your Mum's country driving. Back in the days when cops directed traffic my mum did a wrong turn at an intersection and ran over the cop's foot, he was in too much a pain to make a comment and just waved Mum on.
judyanne

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

hi again ross

thanks for your comments. i have heard so many funny driving stories like yours and mine. maybe i should put them all to poems and see if anyone would want to publish them. i'll call you way soon lol judy