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the Birth of Destiny

As dark and light merged,
in the touch of fingers
a passover was made

this coupling foretold
that destiny,
would be born

pushed from the cusp
of two worlds,
leaving halos and horns
in a stillness, that ever
sighs of her departure

A single green blade
freed the earth
stealing her first breath,
as tips of flowers interlaced,
it shimmered within her
first dew kissed sleep

observed by immortals
(from both sides)

her fingers painted air,
as feet ran its first steps
creating winds through time,

gasps echoed the heavens
(a gathering had watched)
In awe

their desire
had been to keep her,
sacrificing their love
they gave this beauty
a life, purpose

a smile
at the end laughter
the comma
in the birth of tears,
became a lighted hope
that embers

all covet her

this galaxy of beauty
born on the cusp,
passed us all today 
and walks among us

(immortals maintain their gaze)

and destiny? found me
as I write on her tail,

and touch the profound

— Seren, Mar 25, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Judd

thank you for your wonderful comment I appreciate you my Ozzie mate (((hugs))) OI OI OI ;) love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe

favorite lines: and destiny? found me as I write on her tail, and touch the profound I am speechless! Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Cat

Those lines are some of my favourites in this as well made me dance when you pointed them out I had been unsure of them love to you darlin hope your well love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ephy

As it should be so then it must be thank you for your comment (hugs) love JayCee
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Dale

Thank you soo much for your comment i was unsure if I had nailed this one ... but after a very tough edit(this was much longer) I finally decided to reveal and see if I had gotten it right or not we can all only give what time we have there are days(like today) where my times limited so dont stress on it hun love JayCee
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

A true artist a work

A true artist a work Jayne...lovely...just so lovely. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Xena

Big hugs that means a lot coming from you thank you love and hugs JayCee x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 2 months ago

i bow.MumWords must be used

i bow. Mum Words must be used like stepping stones: lightly and with nimbleness, because if you step on them too heavily, you incur the danger of falling into the intellectual mire of logic and reason. - Balsekar
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dearest Mum

Thank you ... for that honour love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
C

Clem

16 years 2 months ago

Permission

What a great uplifting poem. The theme of cusp and the meetings it implies was super, and you carried it through the piece. Congratulations. And may I ask? My daughter is having a baby in April. May I copy your poem and share it with her?
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Clem ~!

I would be honoured if your shared this with your daughter ... I wish you both good wishes on a safe and happy birth ... sigh babies lol I am such a sucker for them (hugs) Love Jayne-Chloe x x
L

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Awesome

Awesome. Take a bow. Very well written and presented missy moo, just stunning. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

This ones one of my

This ones one of my favourites ... just love the connotations the word destiny brings to my mind something I like playing with is destiny lol love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 2 months ago

hi there

Just love this, its so elusive, so..I'm lost for words, it takes me into another world, like a Fragonard painting or Debussey's music, beautiful, endlessly rewarding to read.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Oh trust me i have days

Oh trust me i have days where I am so not fucking brilliant but its when you get the brilliant that you know its good :) smiles love JayCee
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 2 months ago

Bollocks! I highly doubt

Bollocks! I highly doubt you're any less the fucking brilliant every day. Else we'll have a case of buggaration, and fuckery. Sorry I have a lot of British friends lol.
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

LMAO Alex I have a few brit

LMAO Alex I have a few brit mates so I hear you hahahaha smiles love Jayne-Chloe still pmsl at your comment thanks for the smiles
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 2 months ago

Finally I've allowed myself to catch up

She as earth, she as mother, she as artist The lines pushed from the cusp of two worlds, gives an etherial feel to this ...do the angels or jinns walk among us inspiring us with unseen encouragement. I like the feel this leaves me with Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

one persons angel is

one persons angel is anothers Jinn ? I like to think both pushing together create the magic of the earth and the air of the heavenly love and big hugs Jayne
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 2 months ago

You touch the profound

Ann of Norway You found the profound, you found what we can only find in poetry with poetry's words we can fly to places we cannot see, foresee, we can only visualise this profundity and you have given our eyes lenses with which to attempt to touch Destiny in our day-dreams. "a passover was made" "pushed from the cusp
 of two worlds, 
leaving halos and horns " "as feet ran its first steps 
creating winds through time," "passed us all today  
and walks among us "(immortals maintain their gaze)" We maintain our gaze into your heart Jayne as you parted the sky and let us through into your world of words. Love Ann
Seren

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Ah to be the creator of

Ah to be the creator of destiny ... destiny just the word holds a million conotations for me and this one was bubbling for a little while and then formed itself something thats not common for me these days ... loved your comment made my morning :) happy holidays to you dear one love Jayne-Chloe x x x