Fleur MacDonald

Mar 17, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Anzac: The Broken Landing

The luminous glow of the early morning

before the sun appeared in the sky

climbing a harsh unforgiving landscape

they scrambled for footings

into deep sandy crevices

defeated by Turks hiding at the top

leaving a memory in the yellow sand

their hats lie where they once stood

Anzac: The Broken Landing...

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: AUS

Comments

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

I’d love to see your

I'd love to see your artwork, Fleur. What joy creating words & word paintings. Can you provide a link to share? How are you feeling? Hugs, Anna "To love another person is to see the face of God." Les Miserables

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks Anna

but I haven't finished the painting yet, if I'm really happy with it I was going to put it up on facebook and then eventually my website. what ever I decide, will send you a link so you can see it... I'm still the same, waiting to see the Opthamologist before going in for surgery next month...will keep everyone posted on the progress... :)fleur xx

Clem

16 years 1 month ago

Art sparks art

I love it when art sparks art. In this case it will be art sparks art sparks your painting. Cool!! I cannot resist one word suggestion; How about the word “red” in front of the word “memory” in line 7. IMHO you don’t need to say “defeated by Turks” The “Turks hiding at the top” says it all. And crumple the hats – symbolic of defeat. What great inspiration for a poem

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 1 month ago

Thanks CLem,

but you can keep your "red" as I feel Gallipoli back then was confronting enough...but thanks anyway, glad you liked it... :)f

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Fleur

beautifully done my darlin ... I am in awe of you your art and your mind ... come back to us soon will ring you sometime this week ... love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 1 month ago

take care my darling,

and try and stay out of trouble will you... thank you :)fleur xxxxxxx

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Me and trouble are best

Me and trouble are best friends lol (((hugs))) just made me laugh and scare my diamond python hes laying on my shoulder lol love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x x x x

weirdelf

16 years 1 month ago

Aussies thrive on trouble! o!oi!oi!

(((((hugs)))) to you both Cheers, Jess, “A poet’s work; to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world and stop it going to sleep” Salman Rushdie

lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Firstly

Lovely to see and read your words, good luck with the comp, take care and I enjoyed your poem, wonderfully written. All the best with your painting also. And yes, you keep us informed. Luck, love and all the best dear Fleur. Love Lyz. XX

judyanne

16 years 1 month ago

Hi fleur

jess suggested i read you and i'm glad he did. wonderful write cheers judy