ziggy

Mar 24, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

MORTAL EMBERS

Embers burn even when
passion escapes me
residing in this vault of
thoughts admittance to
which is sacred .

A combination of fragrance
wafting effortlessly as if limp
on a breeze, destination
coming to rest where it does .

Like seedlings scattered on
fallow ground taking root in the
absolute , dwelling within as
how the earth felt when she was
young .

In time the spoil shall own this
mortal flesh, dis-dressed from all
that binds me the ever after find me .

— ziggy, Mar 24, 2010

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ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

hello a new name to me , you are i think pondering is good , that line you mentioned mmmmm i can`t decide at the moment this was posted unedited , i will have to ponder on it later cheers ,,,,,,,,ziggy

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I loved this one but I offer a suggestion for these lines A combination of fragrance waft(s) effortlessly as if limp on a breeze (is destiny) coming to rest where it does . dont ask me why but that hit me and if you dont like the suggestions they are just that suggestions but this is another brilliant write from you loved it love Jayne-Chloe

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

cheers and good suggestions to boot this is another i posted like the last without an edit which i don`t mind doing as(good)comments can only help, but my mind is on another write this evening so i will have to come back to this when the head is in the right place , thank you again for gracing my page jayne ,,,,,,,,ziggy

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

I love the imagination and

I love the imagination and what this great poem represents Ziggy. Rosina xena465

ziggy

16 years 2 months ago

hi

cheers rosina , a theme revisited which i don`t often do but subject matter can be hard to find sometimes cheers ............ziggy

loved

16 years 2 months ago

Seeds sown

Seeds spilled in an oven hotly wet The products would be the best Can you not bet? Loved by one and all

lyz

16 years 2 months ago

Wonderful

Deep yet beautiful. A wonderfully worded piece. Bravo. It would sound great spoken. Lyz. XX

Candlewitch

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Ziggy

I, too, would like to experience this piece as spoken word. Brilliant! Always, Cat

pamela

16 years 2 months ago

awesome

Dear Z., I love the way you reference the mind. The sacred stated in the open yet still well hidden. P.

Hooded Stranger

16 years 1 month ago

Zigs

I have just read a few of Cat's poems which gave me a feeling of calm and tranquillity. This one mirrors those feelings. I read it through a few times and you know me with my tempos and melodies, well, this one requires a very slow and gentle beat...beautiful. Last stanza is amazing. Perfect title too. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".