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Shortie Don't Blaze

Shortie don't blaze
Won't toke no purple haze
She wanna be pure
Free mind fo' sure
Free mind fo' meditation
Won't take no medication
Won't smoke no draw
Cuz shortie wanna be pure
Pure and beautifully free
She only drink green tea
She be a fiery sagittarian
An adventurous vegetarian
Cuz shortie wanna be pure
A pure an' natural law
She abides to
A new age view
On simple living
She be fair and giving
To Mother Earth
An' shortie gives birth
To poetry
Melodies
Music
Babies
An' prayers
To share love an' light
Make the sun shine bright
Cuz shortie wanna be pure
Cuz she wanna find a cure
To heal the world some day.
— Poetree, Mar 22, 2010

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Geezer

Geezer

16 years 2 months ago

Shortie Don't blaze

You should break this down into stanzas. I got the idea that you have a rap-background and that you were commenting on the fact that this person wanted to stay clean so as to be prepared to do their part in helping the world be a better place. I wasn't sure in what context to take it, were you makling fun of this person? Good effort but needs work in being clearer. ~ Geezer
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Poetree

16 years 1 month ago

Wow

Wow!!! I love your addition to it, thank you!! It has made it really worthwhile! I am so pleased that you can relate to the way it is meant to be read - you totally got it!!! I have never seen the spoken word bit, I'll check it out!! Thanks, Peace n love, Joel :-)